All in all, the writing is not bad, but it's not phenomenal either, aka it's not something I would read simply because the writing is fantastic. A little too much tell in some parts, but first person novel, so I guess. en
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Finished reading up to chapter 10, I believe.
Not bad, but too much info dump exposition at certain parts that bore me.
I despise reading that.
Anyways, I don't have anything to say about the romance. The story's ok, plot development is slow, I don't know where you're trying to go, maybe I shouldn't have skimmed the info dumps, but this is what happens.
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Also your writing is pretty good, tone down the complexity in certain parts.
Writing with too many hard hitting words will make the reader not understand, and writing too long will drown out certain words like white noise.
What I'm saying is you need some simpler sentences. AND SIMPLER PARAGRAPHS. Reading your paragraphs can be extremely ailing and mind-slogging since all of them are going into what I call "essay length".
That aside though, I really enjoy your writing. It's extremely visual.
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AuHNG Hey, I already add your book to my library. https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/18425139706769805?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4314144361
Your novel is slice of life, so far. The prologue made it seem like it was going to be some sort of revenge/heartbreak story lol.
I just think you need to speed up the pace, work on your writing a bit, and the characters.
blurb has some mistakes.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-tenth-victim_18705056705660905
this is a thriller novel with lots of twists and mysteries!
ehh, your novel has some of the same themes as heaven's official blessing.
and I enjoyed 3/4 of that novel (HOB), (didn't really care all that much for the romance tho).
However, I don't really like reading your novel? Sorry, I dunno. HOB has mystery and humor, and a compelling intrigue that is established in the first chapter. I'll continue reading to see if my opinion changes later. Up to chapter 12 rn.
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link it next time, I'm lazy as a Cheeto, and a Cheeto can't move, y'know.
problems with writing and tropes. also use the author's notes, it's there for a reason.
your novel has a similar beginning to two webtoons I read, something about princesses, a father who's kind of a douche, and a sexist society that the fl has to change.
I didn't like reading them.
Anyways, I dunno, I'll continue reading maybe later. Chapter 6 right now.
four novels? wow.