@waurpel This is a great novel, and I don't think it's dry or uninteresting at all. With that being said, here are some things I noticed:

Title, Cover, and Synopsis

Formally speaking, you should capitalize all important words in your title (everything except for conjunctions and particles). It's possible that you chose to stylize your title, so correct me if I'm wrong. You can keep the format lowercase if you prefer.

The cover art good, albeit simplistic. But's that's not bad or anything. As for the title, I think it would pop out more if you centered the words and placed them near the top or bottom two-thirds of the cover (think of the rule of thirds, also it's more of a guideline than a rigid rule). Also, the words probably need stronger shadowing to bring them out more. Finally, adding your name and the webnovel logo can make the cover look more professional, but that's up to you. In the end, you're the one who gets to decide how they make their own cover.

The synopsis is decent by itself, but you should give some more context. Try to show Silika's daily life, describe the accident, and note some of the repercussions. That will give readers a better understanding of what story they're getting into. The line where you say "her quiet life began" only makes sense to someone who realized that Silika became deaf. Honestly, I think that "quiet life" is a genius line that fits perfectly with the story, but if a potential reader makes that connection while looking at the synopsis, then it will increase your novel's appeal.

Prose and Grammar

The prose is great stuff, all things considered. I enjoyed the way that you described things and you gave a nice insight into the main characters' thoughts. Still, there are a decent amount of grammar errors, most notably missing commas after introductory clauses. There are also spots where you put an extra space between words. I recommend proofreading at least twice, and you should be able to catch most of the stuff I mentioned.

Story

The story is really, really interesting. I found myself wondering just exactly what was going on with Silika, and the reveal was well-done. I quite liked how you showed Goldie's side of the story. On top of that, you did an amazing job of developing the world's religious system without using massive encyclopedia exposition dumbs. Props to you for making such an intriguing world!

Unfortunately, your story fits into a weird/niche genre that webnovel doesn't really have an option for. You labeled it as historical romance, but I haven't seen much history or romance unless you plan on adding that later. I feel that the story may fit into more of just a female-leading fantasy. You also take your time to develop the main characters and their problems, which is great, but a lot of people either don't have the attention span or wouldn't be interested in your genre (not to say that your novel is bad). I suffer from the same dilemma since I take six chapters in my book to develop my main character before getting into the VR gaming portion which I originally advertised. The genre stuff can't be helped, so just keep writing how you normally would do.

Miscellaneous

I put a paragraph comment about this, but I'm pretty sure "Darkie" is a derogatory term. Personally, I don't feel too much of a problem since it follows along the lines of Silika's nicknaming, and she doesn't know better as a five-year-old. I don't think you should have to change it unless other people point out the term, but be careful that you're not offending anyone.

Final Thoughts

You seemed a little bit timid when you requested a critique, but have more pride in your work. Once you fix the grammar mistakes, I think your story can really be a masterpiece, and I'm not exaggerating.

Whenever I feel discouraged with my own work, I tell myself, "It can't be as bad as The Rise of Skywalker." (or insert any trash story that you personally despise in place of The Rise of Skywalker)

Anyway, here's a quick Tl;DR:

• Improve the Title, Cover, and Synopsis for first impressions
• Fix grammar mistakes
• For the love of Meiriem, don't crash and burn such a good story

That's about it. Keep up the good work!

Epyonnn
Thank you very much for your review! A lot of what you mentionned is very insightful.
I've already gone ahead and modified my cover to be a bit more on point!

I'm actually really struggling with the synopsis, it's my third one already and I'm still working on it. I don't want to give too much away and yet I still have to entice readers... It's a real pickle.

Yeah, my grammar and review process needs some improvement. I'm admitedly a very slow reader so reviewing myself is always something I struggle with, but must improve!

My genre IS niche and that's a hill I will happily die on. It's a story I want to tell and it adresses a lot of topic that I think are important. Webnovel sure isn't helpful by making anything with a female protagonist automatically a romance, but that's another topic all-together... I mostly put it as historical because of her standings as a noble (which the story will not stray too far from without spoiling anything), but there is a lot of fantastical element, so I will consider changing it.

Yeah you got me good with the Darkie thing. Interstingly, the issue of colour (and their related dieties) in my story is meant to be a commentary on real world xenophobia/racism. I DID go through about 3 other names when developing the plush, but anything I came up with that would be realistic in character always felt more derogatory or out-of-character. I think I'll stick with it for now unless I start getting harrased over it. Admitedly I'm ESL so it didn't really occur to me that Darkie could be put in the same league as other terms that I would trully consider racist.

Yonko_master

Alright, first things first, I choose to ignore your request because you didn't use the method I described in the first post.
Second, it seems someone already picked your request. Did you accept it?

waurpel I'll help you out with the synopsis. Here's an idea:

In a world where rank, blood ties, and religion are intertwined, Silika Everest lived an idyllic life as the third child of the Marquess of Oblon, spending her carefree life playing with her siblings and friends to her hearts' content.

Until one fateful day, when she fell off a tree and injured herself. When she woke up from the injury, everything seemed...wrong and confusing. She couldn't hear a thing. Now, her family despises her, and she doesn't know why. Silika's entire world had been flipped on its head.

That day her quiet life began—an unforgiving life where all odds were stacked against her.

Basically, I added the part "spending her carefree life playing with her siblings and friends to her hearts' content." to give more context about Silika's daily life. I also described the accident without going into too much detail (hopefully). Other than that, I also fixed some grammar. I hope my idea can help you formulate your synopsis.

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Title : I HAVE A FIANCEE ?!

Genre : Royal romance, Realistic

Synopsis :
"You're early. Why the bad mood ? Getting married so soon your highness ?"

"Shut up, Jaden. This is no joke. It's the 21st century for god's sake and I'm still 22 which means I've got a million things to do and marriage is not one of them. Damn it! I don't know what Father is thinking" I was annoyed.

"Well, it was a surprise when he actually listened to you and let you come to college when what you actually should've done is participate in all those boring political discussions, give a comment here and there and serve the country. You are our beloved, handsome, genius one and only prince after all" Jaden cracked up laughing. Making fun of me seemed have become an annoying hobby of his, besides making sarcastic comments on almost everything. I sighed.

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Hello,
Please check my story out and give an honest review. I'm open to anything and would appreciate comments on where I can improve.
Title: Find me in your memory
Genre: Contemporary, Fantasy romance
Synopsis:
Meet Elena Carlo
The sister of the cold-blooded king of the international underworld. Not only did she come from one of the most powerful criminal family she was also known as a genius and prodigy amongst her peers. She had everything with her luxury, money, beauty, and most importantly her brother who raised her making everyone envious. He was her everything just like she was his until one cold night where she was assassinated. Just when she thought everything has come to an end. She woke up as Xin Xiulin a 17-year-old orphan who has lost everything. Was a new beginning a curse or a blessing?
Meet Jun Zixuan
The president of a multibillionaire company.The king of the country's business world who only a very few can dare to offend. Having his heart broken already he believed he can never love again until he starts to notice changes in the silent orphan in his house. Her similarities to a certain someone made it easier for her to worm her way into his heart. While all she knew was familial love can he teach her something new? While she would like to go back to her brother can he stop her?
But what if her shadow of the past never left her? Would it come back to haunt her? Will she embrace that fire or burn in it?
But the life of Xin Xiulin wasn't as easy as it looked. While past acquaintances kept coming can she know who is a friend and who is a foe?
If you want to know the answer come join her and him in this wonderful journey of love, hatred, and longing.
Link:https://www.webnovel.com/book/find-me-in-your-memory_20311302605090405###
Thank you

Epyonnn

Ohh that does sound good! I tried to give it a twist, how does this sound:

In a world where rank, blood-ties and religion are intertwined; Silika Everest lived an idyllic life as the third child of the Marquess of Oblon, spending her time causing trouble for the estate servants and playing with her siblings to her heart's content under the doting

Until a faithful day when a game of hide and seek turned into tragedy. When she woke up, her life had turned on its head, everything she had and the people she loved slipping away from her.

That day her quiet life began— an unforgiving life where all odds are stacked against her.

How's that?

Yoan_Roturier
Thanks a lot.

waurpel that’s great! Consider cutting “under the doting” in the first paragraph since it adds another clause that makes the sentence a little confusing. In the second paragraph, the last is a bit hard to read, so try splitting up the sentences or cutting some things if possible.

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Soulmate Game : Her Lethal Love

Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/soulmate-game-her-lethal-love_20340245006547205

Synopsis:
Everyone has a destined soulmate, and in the World of Syre, a game is played amongst four empires to find your fated half.

Occurring every 30 years, chosen nobles and royalty are gifted with the memory of their past life and an invitation to the game by the Mercy of God. The rules are simple: find your soulmate at all costs.

If you lose, you and your family are cursed to die within 12 months. If you win, you are gifted with the highest social class's prosperity and wealth for the rest of your life.

Mira was a spy who reincarnated into an orphan peasant. When she receives half of her memories with an invitation to the True Half game, her first motivation is to find and save her brother.

But why are these three handsome men always in her way? The playful Duke heir, the cold-hearted Crown Prince, and the mysterious noble Xith keep messing up her plans! Mira wants nothing to do with them—until it’s revealed that one of them is her real True Half.

Will she find her brother?
Will she find her soulmate?
Will she uncover the secrets of this evil game?

Let’s find out.

waurpel yep! that's good

MimiTea I'll give it a read

I'm a new strand in this thread who would love an honest review.

Title: Devil Child
Genre: Fantasy, Action, Adventure

Autistic and alone, Noe begins a new life at a mysterious school. Trapped in a sea of faceless people, prejudice, and pain, he has no choice but to learn to coincide with evil. In the small town of Westville, at a school erected within the heart of chaos, the incredible power that Noe possesses is awakened.

https://www.webnovel.com/book/devil-child_19990523105255605

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Yoan_Roturier Hey! I know this is a thread for review swipes, but I would like to be your editor.
DM me if you are interested. Prikkrang#6083 is my discord id.

Yoan_Roturier
Hey! I know this is a thread for review swipes, but I would like to be your editor.
DM me if you are interested. Prikkrang#6083 is my discord id.