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DKQ Thanks, I'll try to not use the full system's page, just like the important parts during that part of the story. But I seriously can not think of how I would go without using numbers, the highest so far is 100 levels, which is nice and round and not complicated, can't separate the skills numbers with normal, rare, epic etc like what's highlighted either.

I am going to create an aux page to describe the immortal levels AFTER it's been show in the actual novel, and there won't be that many skills from now on to be honest (trying not to spoil anything).

It can be confusing at the start because of the status page but what can I do about it? It's when it first pops up a few times trying to show how it works.

DKQ <3 You already read it? OMG hahaha thank you so much, that's all i could say hahaha I'll do a better world building on my next novels, thank you :)

Pegazz It is a great novel but the numbers really was too much, you hand from power to cells (everything including brain, eyes and so on) I just want to recommend trying a path where its a few lines instead of a 100 lines. Simplify it and hopefully, that would make it the best :)

Cobyboy stopped at 43, planning to wait till it reaches chapter 100 because It pains me to wait for each chapter.

@DKQ Please take a look at mine as well.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/10599812306072605/The-Challenger
I started out a few weeks ago and have tons of mistakes, including some unused plots (<10 chaps). Please point out any mistakes and errors you find. I'll be very grateful!

@DKQ I've re-wrote the synopsis, I did go back and re-edit all chapters with the Grammarly thinking it's fine since I was unbanned in the reposting thing, but bug happened and most of the chapters are gone, but other than that, all's well. Hopefully, the chaps come back soon.

DKQ

DKQ could u give me ur review?

Herr is my novel link
https://m.webnovel.com/book/10375200206022405

Btw, there may be some errors that are visible in the prologue, chapter 1,2 and 3. Because I'm trying to edit it myself. But it's been quite better in chapter 4 and so on .(someone helping me) But I do not know.
I really appreciate it if you want to give your opinion.

Thank you

DKQ I'll make sure to fix my transitional phrases on the next chapters for sure! Thank you so much for the feedback!

Newbelist I feel so embarrassed, the amount of grammar mistakes in my review was pure bad! I would like to apologize on that as I was going through some over-time with my review time and as you can see the results, its bad! bows down

AidaHanabi The idea is great, the way you wrote during the first 2 chapters are amazing but why am I seeing simple mistakes? We are talking about grammar, a mixture of UK and US English and several small mistakes with the adjectives used. Most the things have been mentioned above except one small thing which I would like to mention here, the usage of caps such as the prologue usage of (ex. "YUKIII") this needs to be removed because it affects your novel quality.

For the adjectives, I would recommend to Try to find words or specific adjectives that capture what exactly you are trying to say instead of using two-word phrases with modifiers like "very" to hold up weak adjectives. (EX: very hard)

I can see some improvements from chapter 1-10 and some changes to your writing which means you have improved either from help or by self-reflection on mistakes (Both are good). Hopefully, you can improve the main things I have pointed out, I am not a professional but a reader and this small things are easy to spot when you are reading carefully. Good Luck and keep up the good work.

@DKQ love what you are doing man... Can you give my novel a look in? I'm planning on editing it once I'm done with the first volume.

Here is a link to the novel... https://m.webnovel.com/book/10425717206035305?keyword=The%207%20&source=auto

(Sorry for giving you the mobile link, I'm currently using my phone). The title of the Novel is called The 7 Realms....

Thanks bro...

tooTired I got your back! Let us go through the basic mistakes which I noticed in the first chapter and second, we have overused words mate, that is very bad because unless its a characteristic of the character in the story then change it (Usage of Grammarly or other similar sites to help you out with it can be good). The best way to improve your novel (based on chapter 1 and 2)

Improvement:

• Word Choice (Can be better)
• Transitional phrase Improvements (Read 1 of the comments above)
• Sentences (Very Short compared to other novels)

We also have an issue with Passive vs Active voices, the best way to improve that would be from this reference : https://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/CCS_activevoice.html

Simple yet easy to not find issues, I would recommend reading your novel out-loud if you have issues with writing as it can help you improve your work by leaps! Keep up the good work and good luck!

Would be going to try another style to reduce the number of novels I will have to review, already taking most the time of my day so I will link to this site which has been linked to me by a great person on this site, it will help with your novel and will make you improve a lot!

http://www.writersdigest.com/online-editor/your-novel-blueprint

Before asking me to review any novel please make sure to read what I typed above, based on that I should have answered many common mistakes, I am but a reader and I also can't read everything at once, if anyone can help me out with this please reply to DKQ#7294 on discord and hopefully once we reach 100 posts we will create a discord server to answer several small issues while reviews will be posted here. Thank you, everyone, for your support!

MrDojo Well your novel is a first :) I have noticed how you have a balance between simple and complex sentences, the story itself is amazing from the start. Only issues I have noticed which needs improvements are:

Issues

• Sentences beginning (Always remember, a sentence variety will make your novel special)
• Vocabulary (Helps with conveying what you want to say)
• Outline your entire story (I have noticed how some mistakes happened from time to time due to you taking breaks while writing, this issue is called writer's block)

Some references to help you out:
https://goinswriter.com/how-to-overcome-writers-block/
https://www.time4writing.com/articles-about-writing/vocabulary/
http://www2.eit.ac.nz/library/OnlineGuides/Sentence%20Starters.pdf

Can you please give insight into my work as well?
I would like to know your honest opinion about my work,so that I can ameliorate my work in the forthcoming chapters.
link is:
https://www.webnovel.com/search?keywords=IT%27S%20ALWAYS%20BEEN%20YOU
I really appreciate your work and thank you.

alostgirl I finished reading 5 chapters, not my taste as I rarely read romance type of novels but I can easily identify this is a copy of vampire diaries, I wouldn't say it is a bad thing but its just very similar. The first thing I have talked about in my thread is copying someone else work, it is fine if you want to make it into something similar but copying is very bad without permission. Let us go through the common mistakes first and identify the mistakes:

mistakes

• Grammar (minor mistakes)
• Phrasing (an issue which can be resolved by referring your work to other novels)
• Sentences (No balance, need to refer to a comment above I made about sentences)

Some mistakes as I have talked about can be read out loud and this will help you improve by leaps. I hope you the best and good luck with your work!

DKQ I think u mistook my work, but only two character names are from the series, but rather than that, nothing really matches. I choose the characters name from that series, bcoz I like them.
Thanku for the advice, I will make sure to improve in the future.