Junni_MC

A bit on your writing, but also your premise is good, but in a way, it's a bit overdone, so I definitely think there are ways you could improve the story. I think your story need good villains, just don't fall in the trap of making them two dimensional: maybe make them seem 2D at first for good face slap. I would read stories like Reality Quest and Questism (both on webtoon) to get a sense of where the general plot needs to go in order to be enjoyable. Meanwhile, read solo leveling to get what is generally rated as the best novel with your premise.

      AuHNG Okay I have already written your review under your book. I really liked it. But the start was confusing. You should delete anything before that Act 1 since it has ruined my first impression. Also, the chapter name is a little weird. The last thing is that the story is really slow-paced maybe consider making it a little faster.

      Here is my book. With your quality of writing, I would love it if you could help me by pointing out something I should improve on.
      https://www.webnovel.com/book/harry-potter-the-forbidden-blessing_25337395705631805

          Para23 I have read your novel and I have left my review, here is my novel for you to read and give your opinion.

              LukasNPC

              Can you explain what you mean by that? Like are you talking about the prologue, because some people said they liked the prologue, or are you talking about the opener?

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