JA_Chrysant
Ohh... I'm sorry for the little error.
Title: A night Copulation with the billionaire.

      B_DRAG
      I finished reading 5 chapters. I'd like to continue a bit before telling the full review hehe.

          DARK_DEKU
          Hmmm, I don't know. It feels robotic to be honest. The flow of the story is flat (it's only consisted of character conversation devoid any real meaning/problem), without background and world-building. The first 5 character should include the premise (what's the main problem, what's MC attitude toward it, why MC must pursue it), some world-building (at least the school, the house, or the town, or the power) and antagonist. There's none there.

              mahe_ale_aba
              I already did. Though, I left the review here because it will be really harsh to put it on the book when it's still not cooked enough.

                  Ninestar619_5803
                  The premise and story are good. Can't wait to see The Emperor get his revenge! But the glaring problem is most of the time, you're not using the right English words (Though I can understand what you mean because I read a lot). The grammar is good tho.

                      Hello, my book is teen fiction. Though most of the characters are teenagers. Just like I'm so I'm still learning to write mature books. However, I'd love someone to tell me how everything is. I'm not an English speaker so my grammars might be _quite....😂

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                        Xero_5825
                        It's goood, very good! Finally, someone writes a good prologue and first 5 chapters well. I like the world-building and how you introduced the side characters. But for the MC, you seemed to restraint his character so much. Why?

                            JA_Chrysant Maybe cuz you are reading a book that's being mass edited right now.
                            Anyways, thx for review. I will make sure to checkout your book in free time.

                                Behemot
                                Your novel will depend a lot on your MC. Most of the readers would like a happy but dorky character like Kumoko, I think.

                                    _Mad_Scientist_
                                    You're a new writer, right? Then, be happy, because this story is good. Though, I think it's better you learn about boys more to portray them better. Men don't commit that easily, unless... there's a catch. I also noticed you're not used to English, huh? Some of your word choices (especially in the dialogue) are still awkward and clunky. Tried to read it a loud and you notice it right away. Good work, waiting for the next chapter!

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