Maeve_Lindley
I'm in. Really liked your reveal at the end of chapter 1, It was done well. WIll read and review. Would appreciate if you could look at mine too 🙂 https://www.webnovel.com/book/eternal-knight_27123642006733305

It's an urban fantasy set in Scotland (Edinburgh) about a Knight

P.S. You might want to go through what you've written and look at the tenses. You switch from past to present tense and back again a fair bit. I prefer past tense: I looked, she kicked, rather than present tense: I look, she kicks etc

    Osakasan Sure, Lets do a review swap. Im willing to read 5 chaps of yours and give you a review.

    Edit: I have read yours and gave a review, Thank you!

        Maeve_Lindley

        Hi Maeve, I've left you a review. Your story is really good! Your characters are well developed, the world is slowly built up, it's really good. Well done 😄

            TsukasaFrier I'll 'Collection' it first, I don't really have the time to read it through so detailed now. Primary because I have to sleep. I'm going to Paragraph Comments and Review it tomorrow.

              Who wants to review swap?
              Does everyone truly deserve a second life? The idea of reincarnation is an opportunity for one to turn over a new leaf. However, what if God reincarnates someone just for his amusement and entertainment.

              That's exactly the case of Fujikawa Takuji, an infamous mafia boss, who unfortunately met his end. God offered him a second life of evil in the Middle Realm, a world of swords and magic.

              However, Takuji isn't reincarnated empty-handed. He is reincarnated with a system - Mafia System. However, Takuji is reincarnated as Chloe Granbel, the first child and first daughter of the Baron Granbel family.

              Read Chloe's journey as she has to build a mafia group in a fantasy world. What will Chloe do to build connections and rise her mafia group

                RyujiSakamata Done! Would appreciate any thoughts you have about mine https://www.webnovel.com/book/eternal-knight_27123642006733305 and an honest review.

                Your story is good, your first chapter is really well written, the later ones not as good. If you want I could go through and comment on the places where tense switches happened, or grammar things, you could then fix them and delete the comments. Up to you though 🙂

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