Book_Keeper Author of Killing Xianxia Protagonists With An AI System In Another World, thanks for the review!
The points to improve in seem to be Plot Development, Character Formation and Reading Level.
What exactly do you recommend me to improve in?
Also, would you suggest a change in title - the title is kinda misleading, I would like the change in title to indicate MC's timetravelling and the R-18 content - those are the major content for the story.
Do check my work for a review
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11772678805522105/35418848932982433
Book_Keeper Killing Xianxia Protagonists With An AI System In Another World! AardwarkThe2nd
Thanks for slotting my work for review!
Plagiarist who is famous for writing Warlock of the Magus World finished Carefree Path of Dreams (逍遥梦路). Novel ended at 1182 chapters.
Plagiarist's new work is Seeking the Sealing Path/ 问道章.
https://book.qidian.com/info/1013565504
The title seems similar to IET's Seeking the Flying Sword Path, doesn't it? Yeah, the main focus in this novel seems to be Seals/ Talismans. The MC is a timetraveler who reached a pretty high cultivation level before dying and reincarnating.
It currently has 144 chapters.
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Get Lost who wrote The Wizard World (recently finished TL on QI) finished his ongoing work Way of the Devil (极道天魔) as well. The novel ended at 1213 chapters.
Get Lost's new work is Summoner of Nightmares /召唤梦魇.
https://book.qidian.com/info/1013861765
Modern world, reincarnation and horror. That's what the flavour seems to be. QI has House of Horrors to give you nightmares, why not add Get Lost's new work on top?
It currently has 25 chapters, but author is updating 3x per day.
Reinesse Great synopsis, nice! Wonder what was the first one?
With a breath remaining, hope is immortal.
Also, new question, is giving MC a unisex appeal advisable (Like FL)?
In the last chapters, I put more focus on describing the MC's awesome appearance than the new girl.
Good luck, everyone! Fighting! 
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JunkieOverThe_Moon I reviewed your story too. It is a bit offensive, but still 5 stars and I spaced it so that my complaints are at the bottom.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11690885806474605/Paradis-de-Fou
Dudu_the_3rd To clarify, MC is more-or-less OK with FL1 doing other girls (cultivation, cultivation) but he doesn't want her to go and fall in love.
FL2 got done by FL1 AND fell in love with her, so it is kinda annoying for MC (because while FL1 doesn't reciprocate FL2's feelings, FL2 is earnestly going to chase FL1 despite that and act lovey-dovey BEFORE HIM)...
Dudu_the_3rd Thanks for the awesome detailed reply!
Well, most things won't go according to what you are predicting since there are basically only two main female leads that MC loves (or believes he can fall in love with): FL1 and the character MC loves.
Sexual encounters with other girls due to various circumstances are there (like FL2) but they aren't really 'lover' material for MC.
MC can't really think of having more girls added because while he has no idea how true love can have multiple women selflessly devote themselves to one man, he is pretty confident of his knowledge of how jealousy can screw up everything (Fun Fact: He read one story about backstabbing consorts and concubines warring in the harem and forever gave up on the possibility of the existence of a functioning harem in general and the entire CN romance genre as a whole).
The question is that FL1 seduces some girls for dual cultivation (female & female is A-OK!) and MC can't really stop her because, well, it is her cultivation and getting in the way of her advancement would be the worst. FL1 can get the backstabbing but yeah, the entire point is that she does the girls for her cultivation advancement and she likes doing girls, so...
Lonely_Sky_Dream Second Reason: There are many yuri-style novels already, it would feel like I am blatantly plagiarizing something else, especially since I am not a girl
If you want to try, Yuri, here is a thick list BTW
JunkieOverThe_Moon Yeah, review swap! Can I try your other novel?
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11690885806474605/Paradis-de-Fou
Lonely_Sky_Dream Oh I could, but I think I can write male leads better. I just wanted to give more depth to the character of a 'seductive beauty' female lead. Like, they fall for MC and their seduction skills aren't used at all, except for attracting arrogant young masters.
I wanted to ask if it feels too NTR-ish, so that I can cut that plotpoint out ruthlessly and avoid 1-star reviews before they fall.
What do you think of FL going around seducing girls? It kinda feels NTR-ish and kinda not. Especially when the story is a harem.
This is a cultivation story, to start with. MC transmigrated into predecessor's body. Story has future knowledge elements involved as well. The story is building to a harem, even though MC is only used to monogamy.
Characters involved - MC: Main Character, FL: Female Character, FL2: 2nd Female Character
MC has one girl who he loves with all his heart, but she currently hasn't appeared in story yet. FL is the Dao Companion of MC's predecessor who was kinda ignored by him. Since he thinks FL is OK as a girl, he helps her out with various stuff and gets her affection + H-Scene.
MC himself hasn't quite fallen for FL yet, but he thinks he will, sometime soon (MC has zero idea how harems can work in reality, he knows how jealousy works well enough). He doesn't want to leave FL alone because he knows how that will roll (future knowledge) + they are Dao Companions due to his predecessor's karma, so he needs to bear it for the sin of possessing his body and soul.
FL herself is pretty talented and focusing on dual cultivation, the kinda girl who oozes seduction. Being ignored by MC's predecessor was detrimental to her cultivation rather than simply self-esteem. She cares enough about loyalty to not go for men, so she gets into a fuck-buddy lesbian relationship with FL2, a girl. After MC actually paid attention to her and banged her, her affection bar for MC rose from 1/10-10/10.
FL2 was more or less FL's les fuck buddy, but she fell in love with FL (FL has dual cultivation build, it works on both genders). Pure love of lilies type. FL2 wants to take FL away from her neglectful Dao Companion somehow. FL doesn't really reciprocate her feelings. MC is kinda offended at FL going around seducing girls, but he doesn't really want to poke his nose into it. (She did it because predecessor ignored her, so he can't blame her.)
Plot: FL wants FL2 to join MC's harem so that their relationship can be officialized + threesomes.
FL2 doesn't really want to do that.
MC doesn't really want to do that.
Well, I'll think of a way to further the plot. The question is still: what do you think of FL going around seducing girls? It kinda feels NTR-ish and kinda not.
Ungamer Are you tired of the "OP Martial Artist IRL uses his mad skillz to solo game despite being a idiot who don't know shit about how VR works"?
https://www.webnovel.com/book/9067131406001405/MMORPG%3A-Martial-Gamer
Anyway, if we had a Russian-English translator instead of Chinese-English, it would go faster. About 1K chapters are up in Russian.