FrozenSynapses
- Aug 1, 2020
- Joined Aug 3, 2018
LunaRenzoX Not really knowledge of alchemy, but there's a book called the strongest system that has pill crafting and is really funny. There's also release that witch, which has stuff like creating gunpowder, concrete, etc. It's all normal creation, except for the witches of course.
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VateRise Alright, I know that I need to rework the first half (like 9 or so chapters) because I went way too briefly over it and need to give more characterization to other people in the story. I also know that I haven't focused on the detail and focus of the environment, technology, bordering nations, etc. This is a WIP, but please be honest with it!
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11329115905340105/The-Last-Space-King
P.S. the latter chapters are better
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May1st Finished and reviewed your novel!
marjzach2012 Reviewed your novel!
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May1st Thank you, I really appreciate the kind words! I'll start reviewing your novel btw.
Gourmet_DAO Sure, I'll review them both later today.
marjzach2012 Wanna review swap?
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Review my novel, and I'll review yours.
Title: "The Last Space King"
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11329115905340105/The-Last-Space-King Cynk_Napp Yeah, I'll review yours. Thanks for the review on mine btw!
_Rain Sure, I'll review yours now
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invayne Reviewed your novel! I'm so impressed with the quality of your work!
invayne Yeah, let's swap reviews!
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Positive_Lullaby Awesome, thanks for the advice. I did change the synopsis. Out of curiosity, did you have a chance to read a chapter or two?
WinterBud Okay, thanks for the advice. I'll try to change the cover to be more fitting.
Here's my novel too if you want to read it:
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11329115905340105/The-Last-Space-KingHere is an edited version of your chapter. Compare the differences between punctuation, wording, and usages of commas. A great addon is Grammarly: https://Grammarly.com
A certain entity was fleeing rapidly in the vast expanses of the universe, its destination unknown. This was an entity whose very existence would make all lifeforms kneel and worship in fear, for this very entity was a "GOD" who went by the name of Zeit. Zeit's external appearance may look normal, or in the eyes of mortals as godly, but only Zeit knew the extent of injuries it had suffered. The only reason a God like Zeit was fleeing was that its entire race had been exterminated in the 'Royal Battlefield', the only realm in the entire universe where the "7th Natal war" took place. The 7th Natal war, even thinking about that horrible bloodbath brought great regret and anger to its mind, but knowing that it could no longer do anything to ease its pain and suffering, it started to look for its final resting place: a place far away from all the wars and death.
"Huh?" Zeit frowned while passing by a blue planet, for it contained traces of life in it."A planet so far into the cosmos. Hmm...interesting." Zeit neared the planet while pondering, "A young planet with only a few thousand years of life sustenance, but…." As it entered into the planet's atmosphere, Zeit was scared shitless, "This is no young planet, there are plenty of remnant auras of powerful gods. How is this possible in such a remote corner of the universe? The laws of this world...Damn."
Before Zeit could complete its monologue, countless chains created from the worldly laws wrapped around Zeit, dragging it to the planet's core. "Heh….I may be injured, but I'm no pushover...This planet, let this be my resting place...Burst!" He said, a feeling of peace and serenity creeping onto its face as Zeit's body slowly broke down into millions of fragments, scattering over the entire planet.
"Heh…I won't be bored here…" Zeit said while seeing its consciousness fade as the mysterious worldly chains disappeared from existence.
Hope this helps!
FroSyn