@ImBloo Thanks for explaining your opinions and suggesting ideas. I appreciate your effort at this and its been really helpful.

The mc is pretty judgmental at this stage.Its a flawed individual. Also, he was not very happy to comply with to the ghost's request to make love to her sister and that is shown in his actions and thoughts. He does it anyway and do a bad job at it. The whole scene is supossed to make you a little unconfortable at the understanding that he really not cares about her but not too much. Although, I grant you that using only Blondie and wench is a little dull. I will try to improve my writing in the future.

I don't really consider necesary to explain what a kender is for now, as is it a very common race in fantasy paperbooks, but if i ever do a list of races for my novel, i 'll be sure to include them.

There is no special reason to alternate between mage and magician. In here, there are used as synonyms despite the slight differences of their original meanings. I prefer to use magician to refer to the mc as it has that old feeling around it. However, sorcerers do practice a specific type of magic. The word is used in a specific way there.

The semiomniscient, unreliable narrator is my style of writing. My other novel also uses it although with a slight difference since that one written in 3rd person. Also, antiheros are weak by definition. They usually struggle with their mental flaws and unconsistant attitudes.

I'm sorry if that style of narrating things or the characteristic of the mc doesn' t appeal to you but there is not much that I can do about it. Its a matter of personal taste and other readers enjoy reading this kind of things.

I will revise the use of the word guy. Although I feel that a word that has been used since the 17thcentury its old enough, rereading through the story made me realize that I overusing it a lot and its better to replace it for a synonym.

Thanks for your input! I appreciate it!

I will consider making changes.

Thank you again for the feeback and suggestions.

ImBloo
Got it. Yea, its kinda in an rewriting stage. I made a hell lotta mistakes when I first published it and it kinda brought down the total appeal of the book, even to me too. When I was first starting the book, i was experimenting with different styles and it messed the novel up.
As for ch 9 to 13 and from ch 20 onward, im working. Inkstone is really fucked up sometimes and sometimes godly helpful.....

As for the disclaimer... Um... Realistic in a sense thar it will not follow the usual trends of webnovels where thoughts for feminism and other 'utopian' feelings are highly regarded.
Emotionally realistic, I would say. For a medieval lord.
As for it being realistic amd them putting such 'fantasy' thingy.... Yes, im trying to mix in a bit of fantasy to 'speed' things up. Yes, I know that it isn't entirely realistic, but frankly, will u believe me if I tell u that I walked half of the earth in two years while simultaneously writing a story on a DESKTOP computer.... Is it possible??
By Realistic, I didn't mean that the MC wouldnt have any superpower or anything. If he didnt have any OP power and still managed to conquer half of a world as big as the sun.... Will u believe such bullshit MC.
Well, its not impossible but definitely not easy. If u think about alex the great, yea, he did conquer a lot, but his governance was next to shit. The mongols. They did it in 1 or 2 centuries time, well after khan died.. If I were to do a completelt fucking realistic novel, then it wouldnt be a novel at all. It would be a history lecture.
U know, when u r making a novel, especially a WN, u need to dilute the truth. In my novel, the dilution would be very less.
If u then ask, WHAT IS REALISTIC?? my answer would be that they would be emotionally realistic, disposition wise realistic and culturally too.
For example, a knight of the catholic pantheon wouldnt naturally be comfortable around the samurai, a dao cultivator, a barbaric Danish Viking, a Heathen warrior of the south ot even beside a lady knight. Its as simple as that.
Welp!!! Now that u said it, I try to work a bit faster, compromise with my studies a bit more and hope to come up to ur expectations.
..... And if I fail in my preboards
.. @ImBloo u will be held responsible....

I find that to be a novel way a novel way of doing a synopsis actually. But I still have to agree with @ImBloo
The style can be left like this, but summarize it a bit. Use indirect speech, you can still add in details but not that much. Instead add those things ImBloo mentioned
But I urge you to keep the synopsis similar. I think, if such a style should ever work, then it’s would be for a genre like this, as most probably are already familiar with the genre. Really interested in seeing how it will work out for you

Blackvision @ImBloo yeah... like I won but Bloo's novel has almost as many collections and views. And will soon overtake mine.

@ImBloo congrats!!! What's Jessie's name here...? Lol

@ImBloo nice map...... if you want a map that has mountain, river, tree, tower, city, town...check this page.
https://inkarnate.com
An example that, I made:

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check this:
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They have some feature that maybe interesting to all of you.

MasterRabbink that's really interesting... from my stats, 25% of my collections come from US... I'm from South East Asia...

Do you have experience targeting the US market...? And what time zone and time is good to target them...?

@ImBloo I like your story! Don't stop! Hijacking it... what do you think of my synopsis? ;)

SnoozySloth thank you and gonna try it! What's your novel? Gonna give it a read after 20 chapters of @BabyTanuki Macha's journey. Have done @ImBloo novel review already :)

@SweetsTomato @ImBloo @Misguided_Rooster @BabyTanuki Thanks for your feedback! What are your Webnovels...? Maybe I can read and learn ;) and leave a review in exchange for your taking the trouble to guide me.