RisingGlory Dungeons and Dragons ;)
https://www.webnovel.com/book/16708176405923905/The-Last-Dragon-Hunter
QuidSevilla
- May 9, 2020
- Joined Apr 18, 2020
Lilliny thanks! Very helpful!
hungrywolf that's a good realization. I hope you find the cure for the thing that stops you. Cheers!
owen_cole motivations bots I think, at first I thought they were genuine though lol
Veronica8 incongruent flow of thoughts, discontinuity of ideas. Numbers and details that we forgot in our previous paragraphs.
LostInFictions yes! My bad haha.
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Title: || Acceptance ||
Author: LostInFictions @LostInFictionsTypo: No typos so far.
Verbs: Did not find one so far.
Sentence Structure: Well written!
Dialogues: Love them!
Logical Errors: Found none.
Your work is sweet! More powers to you! Not just sure though on what's the purpose of the bars in your novel's title.
Title: Fortune Divination
Author: JKaiyaTypo: No typos so far.
Verbs: Did not find one so far.
Sentence Structure: Original [Well...somethings...were perhaps better left unsaid.]
Rewritten [(Well...some things...were perhaps better left unsaid.)]
Dialogues: I understand that your style dwells with an ellipsis. Good job on using them.
Logical Errors: Found none.
JKaiya Prepositional phrases that start with "In" needs a comma.
https://prowritingaid.com//grammar/1000157/Why-should-you-put-comma-after-prepositional-phrases
JKaiya Thank you! This is helpful! :D
Fantasy: The Last Dragon Hunter
Synopsis:
At the said age of dragon extinction, Vance Valfern, an orphan and infamous thief in the Kingdom of Soden, finally ended up in prison. As punishment for his crimes, the king’s counselors enlisted him to a tournament of death.
In his fight for survival, he learned about his ancestry—he's the last of the fabled “dragon hunters.” With his true identity revealed, the king offered him a pardon. In exchange, he must join a treasure hunt in a lost island called Aragon or “the dungeon of dragons.”
Together with a quirky group of hunters, he must uncover his past, find the ancient artifact, and survive the dangers of his uncharted exploration—all of these in the name of truth and freedom.
Veronica8 thanks for this thread! It's really encouraging :D
LostInFictions Thank you so much! Finally, I found them! hahaha. Changes made now. Cheers!
RABBITICOL yes, thank you! Will work on that :D
Tinalynge Nice! Very helpful!
@Overlord_Venus this is a brilliant thread!
Are you into knights and dragons?
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Title: Forsaken By Love
Author: Tinalynge @TinalyngeTypo: No typos found. Good job!
Verbs: I suggest that you double-check your passive verbs and replace them with strong words. “There is no such thing as good writing, only good rewriting.”― Robert Graves
The Author already noted that she'd edit it again. So, please don't forget to choose words that keep the story moving.
Sentence Structure: Original [Being stabbed in the back, and dying all alone, the hacker He Lixue suddenly found herself in the room of the princess, in the body of the princess, and for some weird reason, she had gained all her memories.]
Rewritten [Stabbed in the back and dying alone, the hacker He Lixue then found herself in the room and body of the princess. And for some weird reason, she gained all her memories.]
Dialogues: No dialogues in this chapter
Logical Errors: Found none, but the flow of narration can still improve by removing passive verbs.
Hoping this could be of help to you! I'm looking forward to the brilliant mind that will review my work.
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/16708176405923905/THE-LAST-DRAGON-HUNTER
hungrywolf I'd love to hear your ideas. Here or in discord?
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THE LAST DRAGON HUNTER
https://www.webnovel.com/book/16708176405923905/THE-LAST-DRAGON-HUNTER)
Synopsis
At the said age of dragon extinction, Vance Valfern, an orphan and infamous thief in the Kingdom of Soden, finally ended up in prison. As punishment for his crimes, the king’s counselors enlisted him to a tournament of death.
In his fight for survival, he learned about his ancestry—he's the last of the fabled “dragon hunters.” With his true identity revealed, the king offered him a pardon. In exchange, he must join a treasure hunt in a lost island called Aragon or “the dungeon of dragons.”
Together with a quirky group of hunters, he must uncover his past, find the ancient artifact, and survive the dangers of his uncharted exploration—all of these in the name of truth and freedom.
Open for review swaps—add me in Discord
QuidSevilla#5829
Michael_Gusevsky noice! Looking forward then :D see you!