popular_ruki
- Dec 26, 2022
- Joined Jul 1, 2022
Choka well if that is what you believe, I guess you keep going with that
Choka Hiiii choka... ouuf uhmmmmmmmmm, Okay so nice story line but it lacks energy, emotions Chapter 1,2,3 these are were to grab your readers not midway into the book, what i am saying is the beginning of the book is really boring, for someone who found himself in another body he was giving off a "too chill attitude" when I got deeper into the book I saw that it was interesting because any book on magic to me 70%(because I am not a complete nerd) interesting... but not many people who read will give a chance to a book when chapter 1-7 is just plain
Let me tell you what my big sister told me when she read my book for the first time, she asked "if I was a robot" yup because my book sounded as if a robot that lacked human emotions and imaginations wrote it.... So when you are trying to portray when Mike is using his power again, imagine it, if it is beautiful and powerful enough then write it down( always imagine what you are writing coming to life or playing clearly in your head) I believe great stories come from great imaginationsPerkyPompous_Pixie uhmmm okay... so I did some research; advantages and the disadvantages annnnnd I am just gonna stick with this my little discussion swapping thingy whatever I think professionals can and will do that properly but if you still want me, I'd like to read your book if you'd like
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iwo835 so it is obvious you are not bad, not bad at all... I love stories about gods, Zeus, Aphrodite, Hades you name it, it actually left me staring at the screen saying after chapter 5 I will sleep but I read your book till I ran out of battery... sorry I stopped commenting I got immersed in the book... I do not know why the views aren't much but hey you are good I mean you portrayed what you felt and it is good to affirm to yourself that you know where you are going with this story... I've noticed a good cover also attracts reads saying because I look at covers to know how creative the writer is... ( not saying my cover is good, in fact it is bleh the cover of my book) so get a good cover and I hope you believe in your book buuuuut if you still want to be 100% sure a professional should read it and tell because why not?
Sal_TarLeen awww, thank you but I am not that great... trust me I know
MansonFD7 hi, if you believe you deserve attention, then you might not get it, my dad told me "ruki you are good and you deserve the attention but let others find you and give you attention, let others praise you because you are good at what you are doing not because you deserve it... so I will read the book ouuuu it's two books might take a while
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vesnxx awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, I wish I had emojis to express myself, that is the energy I wish I had when I got my first rejection, and it was my first book ever to be seen, so I felt awful, and it is the same play I am working on here on web novel, Thank you because although the book isn't getting the view I want, it is my story and it is beautiful to me, and my family who are my biggest views always ask about how the story is going, that joy is worth so much sooooooo much so this energy is what I'll keep no matter how scary or tough the world get... There will always be rejections, criticism, and haters but Hey my mom, my dad my sisters and brothers and my best friends love the play so f**k it, I am not changing my play to a story because I believe it can become a beautiful play(someday) WOW I just typed this
Camira_Ja surrrrrrre my pleasure
GrandSky sorry what is review swap?? I am totally new to that word
Camira_Ja So, honestly, you are not portraying the book properly, I got confused at some point, Grammatical errors won't stop a good book from being good, so focus on how you can portraying the book, first understand how you character feels; for instance the part where she was angry about the toilet I couldn't feel it, so I can say "if you can feel the anger you can write down the anger" does this make sense? okay I hope this helped? you can make your story better, Just like who wants to make my own book better, you can make yours good too.
GrandSky hiiii, I read your book carefully so that I understand the names and honestly I really have no words for your book, you're great at what you are writing obviously... so big ups to you
Sal_TarLeen Hey sorry it took so long ish, so tbh your book is great and you expressed everything well but I feel it is lacking something, I am not a professional, I just feel something is missing, I just can't place my finger on it... oh well the book is good better than mine at least
cheshir I was laughing because i actually read it to the end and wow! thank you?? but it is very long
BreezyNovels oh I didn't know, I don't know how to do that... ouuf
thanksLu_Shui thank you, I will take your advice, daddy says you learn by accepting you are not perfect (you learn everyday)
Drei05 https://inkstone.webnovel.com/novels/chapter/edit/23658997405024205/63673341235482122
this is my book, you can check it out and I would love an honest feed toodaniz_ Hi, I like your book, is it weird that I sensed anger, sadness at the same time reading it?
AKHIL_GOYAL Your book is amazing, just write how it plays in your head, once you get the idea, do not let it die away, write it immediately, an advice from a fellow rookie writer who loves to appreciate good books.
Isha_24 Hey, I will not say I am one professional, or an expert in plays/scripts or novel but, when I was reading your book, It lacked emotions, thrills... I read it and i sounded like a robot... my advice to you is find what makes your emotions feel real, get a blank page and write your true feelings... stories are beautiful lies we create to look real, find your beautiful lie and make it a reality.