@Sythcake @JuneChristina Yea that makes sense...when i first wrote it out it became a info dump like you said which made me reconsider how to present it.

the actual destination is a global festival on island that the MC has never been too eventhough they live on said island. The purpose of describing and going to the festival is to do some light world building while simultaneously luring the reader into false sense of security of whats to come.

    Jmar225 So kinda like the Lorax movie. I finally watch it. Have you seen it? It would help your realization if you did.

        I always thought that stinky burps would be a badass power. Like the guy is addicted to garlic so he can't stop eating garlic like ever. That would make him super smelly and immune to undead infections. On the downside he has to live as a hermit because of the stench and He will die a virgin unless he wants to get snu snu from a swamp troll.
        Boom I just gave you a compelling character you are welcome. I have more worlds to save SouthToiletWizard out.

        Jmar225 Well long story shirt the towns people was isolated inside a bubble. No one was allowed to leave town but that didn't better because they was all perfectly happy. When a girl told her dream about wanting to see a real tree the little boy who liked her mad it his mission to find one. When the only one in existence had to be planted or else trees were lost forever. The "villain" character made all the towns folks believe that it was unnecessary and can cause illness. He did all that just to coming fooling the people into buying his products and making him rich.

        This explanation of the movie is the point I was trying to make. The richest made manipulated what the people, need, want and saw but in reality they didn't need any of it.

            Jmar225
            Make it so there is a good reason for them to be friends like a same sense of humor a close personalities.

                Jmar225 I would have a scene where someone is explaining to them what's it like. So that when they see it they can compare base on their own opinion of it. Like if they are happy they would agree to it and explain what they see. If they disappointed than explain the grief and disappointment they're feeling in what they see. P.s. This is JuneChristina.

                    I might be writing a love story at this point im not sure if I have a clue what it is anymore. It started as an atypical cultivation story a spoof. Then who the MC is became ambiguous. After that it might now be a romance. Idk anymore. If any of you want some cheap laughs check it out A Slackers Guide to Immortality.
                    Xoxo thanks lol

                      Jmar225 Good. School can eat away all your time. When I was in college I couldn't manage to draw anything persona...... everything was drawn for a grade. I even cut back on writing those five years.

                      Happy Writing!

                          Have you published yet? Or still working on it? >3</

                            Sythcake The English language has too many words that sound the same. Our ancestors had it right grunt at things you like fling fresh feces at everything else.
                            #neanderthalshaditall.
                            #cromagnonfanboywagon.

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