CCmei
It was really help, like a lot.❤ I'll follow the points and I'm glad someone did a detail review, pointing out many things. (T _T) I can see how much wotk it needs, haha. After staying on WN around 8 months now I can find the odd things and lackings.😃 Thank you very much.

      ElianaG If you sincerely wish for an honest review that you will use, please provide a link to your novel.

      Include any notes or warnings if you feel it is relevant.

          Aysel_Inara Editing is hard, perhaps it was the repost too soon. I'm just glad you didn't give up.

          The first (few) drafts of anything is flawed, maybe even shitty. I know my own novels could use a drastic 5 rounds of editing on those first few chapters myself. It even makes me cringe to look at some of them.

          But that's a good things bc iteams you have grown as a writer. That you have improved.

          Sorry for the 8 months late review (lol but I guess that makes it for more stuff for me to review?).

          More things I'd like to add on: Make it enjoyable. To yourself or the readers, make it something you feel you want to read. You can use intrigue, works building or the characters- whatever you like.
          It may be getting to the "main couple" in the later parts of ch 60-70 but that can't hold it. Many times throughout this novel I was not excited or even interested in starting the next chapter. I saw another reader respond "cliff!" to a few of your chapter endings but that didn't feel like cliffs to me. Did not keep that intrigue.

          Make me( any reader) feel something, make me want to be interested/invested.

          Note two not included in review: There's repeated parts from one chapter to another. Maybe you did it on purpose to storytelling sake. But sometimes I feels like a daytime TV show recap
          "Last time on ..." And you just repeat lines.

              CCmei

              Ah! I see.🤔 I got it, well...8 months later review was a good thing at least you find a lot of chapters to point out the major flaws. The less the chapters are, the less criticism (to improve).

                  CCmei

                  Ah! I see.🤔 I got it, well...8 months later review was a good thing at least you find a lot of chapters to point out the major flaws. The less the chapters are, the less criticism (to improve).

                      CCmei i dont suppose you offer your services as a beta-reader, do you?

                          CCmei Hi, if you have the time, I'd really like some constructive, even if harsh, reviews. I really want to improve as a writer, and there's no better way to do it than with some harsh truths sometimes.

                          alernatetext

                          Title: The Traitor's Moon

                          Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/16883722706753905/The-Traitor's-Moon

                          Genres: LGBT, Cultivation, wuxia, xianxia

                          Synopsis: I'm not sure how familiar you are with wuxia and xianxia. The xianxia elements are just starting to crop up in my novel. The inciting incident involves a disappearance. I'm interested in knowing if the main character's voices are easy to differentiate and if their personalities shines through. I'd also like to know if the plot thus far is engaging enough to keep readers wanting more.´

                          Again, if you don't have the time, that's perfectly understandable, in any case it's great that you've freely used your own time to give so many other authors constructive feedback.

                              Snowin
                              Unfortunately no. Can't say I have the time (nor the skill) for that. I wish you all the best though.

                                LuoYeYouLing

                                This one was a loooooong time ago and I saw it's been practically abandoned but I am following the old list of requests the best I can. It's really short so I don't have much to say. Maybe for the newer novel, you have requested?

                                It will take some time though as I work through the list.

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