I want to give free review but-
Aysel_Inara Editing is hard, perhaps it was the repost too soon. I'm just glad you didn't give up.
The first (few) drafts of anything is flawed, maybe even shitty. I know my own novels could use a drastic 5 rounds of editing on those first few chapters myself. It even makes me cringe to look at some of them.
But that's a good things bc iteams you have grown as a writer. That you have improved.
Sorry for the 8 months late review (lol but I guess that makes it for more stuff for me to review?).
More things I'd like to add on: Make it enjoyable. To yourself or the readers, make it something you feel you want to read. You can use intrigue, works building or the characters- whatever you like.
It may be getting to the "main couple" in the later parts of ch 60-70 but that can't hold it. Many times throughout this novel I was not excited or even interested in starting the next chapter. I saw another reader respond "cliff!" to a few of your chapter endings but that didn't feel like cliffs to me. Did not keep that intrigue.
Make me( any reader) feel something, make me want to be interested/invested.
Note two not included in review: There's repeated parts from one chapter to another. Maybe you did it on purpose to storytelling sake. But sometimes I feels like a daytime TV show recap
"Last time on ..." And you just repeat lines.
Ah! I see.
I got it, well...8 months later review was a good thing at least you find a lot of chapters to point out the major flaws. The less the chapters are, the less criticism (to improve).
Ah! I see. I got it, well...8 months later review was a good thing at least you find a lot of chapters to point out the major flaws. The less the chapters are, the less criticism (to improve).
CCmei Hi, if you have the time, I'd really like some constructive, even if harsh, reviews. I really want to improve as a writer, and there's no better way to do it than with some harsh truths sometimes.
Title: The Traitor's Moon
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/16883722706753905/The-Traitor's-Moon
Genres: LGBT, Cultivation, wuxia, xianxia
Synopsis: I'm not sure how familiar you are with wuxia and xianxia. The xianxia elements are just starting to crop up in my novel. The inciting incident involves a disappearance. I'm interested in knowing if the main character's voices are easy to differentiate and if their personalities shines through. I'd also like to know if the plot thus far is engaging enough to keep readers wanting more.´
Again, if you don't have the time, that's perfectly understandable, in any case it's great that you've freely used your own time to give so many other authors constructive feedback.
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http://webnovel.com/book16967852406094705
Please leave a review when you have the time at least it will help in improving my work
CCmei
Greetings! Please check out my novel so I may know what to improve/edit/change. Thank you in advance!
Link:
https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/16981783705008405?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4310679488
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CCmei Hey, I would love to hear some constructive criticism, no matter how harsh it may be. I'm always Iooking to improve my writing.
Thanks for all the hard work that you've done!
CCmei Hi, CC, it would be great if you can give me some constructive criticism. Please take a look at my new fantasy book, The Demon King's Cowardly Vessel. For some reason, I don't really get that many collections even though everyone keeps telling me that it's fine.
It would be nice if I can know your view on this so that I can improve better. :)
https://www.webnovel.com/book/16827682505401205/The-Demon-King's-Cowardly-Vessel
This one was a loooooong time ago and I saw it's been practically abandoned but I am following the old list of requests the best I can. It's really short so I don't have much to say. Maybe for the newer novel, you have requested?
It will take some time though as I work through the list.
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@CCmei Hey! I would love to have some positive criticisism and feedback 
If you don't mind can you please drop a review on my novel?
https://m.webnovel.com/book/17008941506265805
Title : Crimson Instinct
Genre : Romance, Thriller, Modern
CCmei Hi! Feel free to give a review for me if you have the time (it's BL though so like if you're not into that stuff then it's best if you don't read it lol but if you're fine then I would love some genuine critique on how to improve even further- except my bad grammar like swapping your/you're I uh, I am well aware of that flaw lol). Yeah, I legit just gave a one-star review to someone today and they got pretty pissed it seems like and gave me a 1-star review in what looks like out of spite. They also spammed me with the review message in the chapter comments. Not gonna do that again QwQ
Anyway here's my story, it's QT Comedy BL - https://www.webnovel.com/book/14737961205459505/%5BBL%5D-Quick-Transmigration%3A-Is-it-Better-to-be-a-Beta%3F
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Title: Tools of Slaughter
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/16951219706033105
Genres: Science Fiction, Drama, Evolution
Synopsis:
In a world filled with war and horror, she was a tool of slaughter.
She fought her way emotionlessly through the war for her masters' commands.
But it isn't until they die that she realizes how much the people she killed meant to her.
...
People say that being immortal would be an incredible dream come true, but they are liars.
Immortality is a nightmare.
People also say that they would rather have no feelings than to feel hurt.
But she would rather feel something than to feel nothing at all; especially when people who care about her die right in front of her, under her own hands.
She would do anything to become human.
To live, to feel, to die.
To be in control of her own fate.
Even if it means losing everything.
Please check out my book and leave an honest review, thank you in advance :)
CCmei
You really have done a lot of work in this thread and do admire it. However, I myself couldn't do that, but if you want you can review mine. Currently I only have my own review
. As such, please review as open and critical as you can! Fighting!
https://www.webnovel.com/book/16709303806052805
Title: A Path to Crown
Currently no cover
Note: The story is in the darker side, but I do try to keep it lighter. As such, if you have any tips to do it, it will be welcome.
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That's an unfortunate encounter- also one of my great fears on this site. That I leave a bad review on "That" sort of person and they just spam their revenge. For whatever reason, they can't take anything they perceive as 'negative'. (which is not what low necessarily reviews are) (how you 'take' a review or criticism is a reflection on your own character).
Personally I have no issue with BL, I love plenty of BL and LGBTQ stories.
I do dislike bad 'yaoi' tropes and how some stories make a fetish of gay people, especially when 'blindly' written by straight women. It's very hurtful to the community and individual identified. That is another issue entirely.
I do believe however that you stumbled upon a TROLL!
Please don't be offended by them, what they say, or my point out.
Out of sympathy, I went to see this spammer and the low review they made. Are you serious? Did you see the type of self-reviews they made? The juvenile speaking style? How did you ever take this sort of person seriously?
It's very obviously a sort of troll, existing with their own blabber in their own little bubble. Their stories are short, cut off and pretty random. Inside the formating isn't serious at all. This is a person having blahblahblah fun, not 'writing'. It's not a second language thing- each of the 6 chapters cuts off abruptly. They even wrote in the author comment's "Don't like don't read". This sort of person is not sincerely looking to write or improve.
It's clear as laser lights that this is a high chance of troll/spammer and you shouldn't have bothered with them in the first place.
Don't bother wasting any more thought or emotions into that account. They have nothing else productive to do with their time if they're spamming and your reaction is them 'winning', they want to bother/hurt you to divert from themselves. Sense doesn't matter and any sane reader of yours can clearly see that in their nonsense review. You seem to have a lot given over 100 of reviews on your story already. (ahhh what a dream, I want that many reviews!)
It's a troll, don't let it bother you (bc it obviously does from your reply).
Alright, your story is added to the evergrowing list to review.
Something else about your post that I'd like to bring up though:
Saying "if you want" removes your involvement, and invalidates requests. I understand it's a speaking style but it's passive and defers, even pushes, all the responsibility completely to the other party- in this case, me. T
There's nothing wrong with wanting a review or requesting one.
You are not addressing a crowd in a self-promo nor are you awkwardly asking someone out on a date.
You say you 'admire' the work I put in this thread but to use "but if you want you can review mine" In this case is minimizing my time and efforts. (which is honestly a lot, I'm not a fast reader and I read a 'decent' portion of every novel on the list to make a fair review). This is true for any requests you make to ANYONE in the future.
You probably don't mean offense or to be patronizing but this will come off that way, not only to me but others you ask things of in the future.
Be confident in what you want and for what you are saying/asking. More importantly, take control and responsibility into your court.
CCmei
I am thankful to you for giving my story a chance and I ma sorry if I offended you with my earlier post. I truly didn't intend to patronize or offend you. It was my mistake by putting myself in a passive role and you in the active. I will try to avoid it next time.
Moreover, I would like to express once more my admiration for your work. I really didn't mean to undermine your effort and time you have put in all this. And as such, again, I am sorry.
Did I sound more confident? And was my intention better conveyed (fewer possible misunderstanding)? Or did I just sound awkward? If yes, I am sorry. I am just not the best at writing or speaking. However, this isn't an excuse to hurt someone!
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It's cool dude, I'm awkward all the damn time yo.
I could tell you didn't mean it that way, but how things come off is always different (people or weird and complicated.) Especially when it comes to work & effort. (so many things to read, sooooooo many.). Thank you for not getting offended. Same as you I also don't mean offense when I say things.
I might take a while till I reach your story.
Some of the people who requested reviews have such good stats! They make me ask "do you really need another review?" or they're super long and I have my time cut out for me.
Like so many chapters..... (my rule is to read at least 33% of a work before reviewing but I average 70% )