MimiTea

I am trying to be fair with people who spend their times reading our not perfect texts ;)

@Epyonnn you really doing a great job, man.

      Jo_J I see... but I don’t understand since I’m already doing it? I never said I wasn’t going to do it 🤔 and promised from the beginning. I’m not a scammer or cheater, if that’s what you’re getting at... 😰

          Epyonnn Hey! I just finished the first 10 chapters of your book, and I will say I will be keeping in my library ❤️

          Now, for my review, I would like to give you two choices because I wrote a lot of detailed notes that are not sugarcoated at all. The first option is to get the non-sugarcoated version with my direct, honest thoughts. The second option is a less direct but still honest approach, but it might take me a little longer to write up. What do you think?

            modestbaddie Hey your novel seems interesting and it's totally my type! Historical timetravel romance! I have added it to my library and I am currently reading it so I will post the review soon! I hope you will do the same with my book since my genre is also fantasy romance!!!

                I wish to thank @Yoan_Roturier for this great idea.
                I always post lots of pointers in the text when I read. Inconcistencies, moods, suggestions ans such. In review swap, I always feel disappointed that people don't take time to do the same.

                So here I am: I am not harsh, but honest in my reviews. Being a published author (in France), I've gone through the editing process with much suffering and consternation. But I had to admit that it helped. In the end, my novel is better now than it was before the editor clove though it with a two handed axe :D

                So I'm willing to share what I learn. And please, I'd be super happy if someone was willing to do the same on my easy going romances. I've got plenty, take a pick, and don't be shy.
                https://www.webnovel.com/book/in-another-life_18770877206104505 -> modern romance, sweet and short.
                https://www.webnovel.com/book/stage-fright_19074257706310705 -> modern again, featuring a 'famous' actor, a divorce, a little angst
                https://www.webnovel.com/book/god's-gift_18770877105939205 -> modern setting, more angst
                https://www.webnovel.com/book/tristan-and-isolde_18696695205627305 -> historical, my own take about Tristan and Isolde.

                I'm waiting for someone who needs a honest review to pop by. Cheers to all !

                  Let's review swap, I am new to this so please educate me, please state you honest reviews,
                  Genre: Fantasy
                  https://www.webnovel.com/book/exiled_20402580006132605
                  “In a place where gods live there is a ranking that can distinguish your authority, a rising god named Alvis, was a newly formed god of Strategy, formed 230 year, however being newly formed he has ranked high-silver, thanks to his expertise, being able to step within top-silver, made other gods wary of his existence, but unable to do anything because of the heavenly pledge,
                  During his 250th anniversary, because of this a phoenix dropped by a golden scroll saying Alvis is to be promoted to Mid-Class, a Class where you will be rewarded with your own planet, which made others extremely wary of him and other started making speculation of him leaching of gods of higher ranking,
                  with his position being at risk, as soon as Alvis received his new badge a planet was transported to him, Type 1653-Earth, a place where there are living beings are able to survive, he can change the conditions, the information or create creatures that can adopt and to the circumstances of the planet, as soon as this info was given to him he started reshape it into a game like world.”

                  Let's swap reviews and support each other!!
                  Book Name- LOVE ME HARDER, MR. FU
                  Genre- Contemporary Romance
                  Author- Xia_Xia89
                  Book Link- https://www.webnovel.com/book/18680472505563905
                  Synopsis- “Love never dies
                  only the feeling fades”

                  ❃.✮:▹　◃:✮.❃❃.✮:▹　◃:✮.❃❃.✮:▹　◃:✮.❃

                  Mo Shi Lian, 24 years old, a brilliant and successful woman in the field of fashion designing. The only daughter of the Mo family and also the next heir of Mo corp.
                  Fu Zi Chen, 26 years old, the youngest Chairman of one of the world’s top companies, Fu International; and the sole heir of Fu's household. The richest and most eligible bachelor in entire China. Known for his cold and ruthless personality.

                  ⋇⋆✦⋆⋇　 ‧͙⁺˚･༓☾　☽༓･˚⁺‧͙ ⋇⋆✦⋆⋇　

                  A business corporation with an unknown hidden motive between them. What will happen when the fire ignites when the two comes closer? Witness their hot romantic love story and how the male lead chases before our female lead.

                  .・゜゜・.・゜゜・.・゜゜・.・゜゜・.・゜゜・

                  After studying abroad for 5 years, Mo Shi Lian came back to take the charge of her father’s business after getting an emergency call from her father. Their company is in debt and only Shi Lian is the solution to resolve it but the path to success isn’t always easy. Her two cousins, Cai Li and Yin Zhen are the puppets of their mother and try to make the work difficult for our female lead for the greed to acquire Mo family share.

                  .・゜゜・.・゜゜・.・゜゜・.・゜゜・.・゜゜・

                  A one-night stand makes her feel nothing for love. She slept with a man she doesn’t know before coming to China.

                  Two months later, when she joins hands with the Fu company, her life changed drastically. The man she slept with is none other than Fu Zi Chen, the Chairman of Fu Company. He remembered her and always kept thinking about her no matter how hard he tries not to. He was agitated when she refuses to recognize her but smirks, “this is going to be interesting.”

                    Epyonnn I already dmed you my full-length notes, so here is a short review that summarizes the 3 major points.

                    1. Synopsis Needs Work

                    • It basically summarizes the first seven chapters and it doesn't make the reader become intrigued or find the novel different from other isekai novels.
                    • The synopsis also needs to be broken down into smaller paragraphs because mobile readers have smaller attention spans.
                    • The synopsis also needs an overarching conflict that hooks the reader throughout the story. In 1984, it's Big Brother, for example.

                    2. No Overarching Conflict

                    • Though if a laidback approach is your niche, then it's fine but it's hard to keep readers interested if they don't think the story will be satisfying. By satisfying, I mean, a deeper conflict that will or is occurring throughout the story and will be resolved by the end of the book. Resolution is subject to opinion ofc.
                    • This should be stated in your synopsis, as I said earlier.
                    • This should be stated in the first 3 chapters somewhere as well. I already talked to you about what it is for your story, so I'm sure you can do the editing.

                    3. Too Much Telling, Little Showing
                    - You tell us a lot of stuff and everything is almost written in an exposition format, causing it to feel like it's not actually happening in the moment.
                    - Show us what's happening, and the reader will believe it and see it through the MC's eyes. It's not enough to just describe something with a fancy adjectives or label the clothes a person is wearing. You have to describe the importance of the clothes + why the setting is "picturesque". Why is it important that this setting is "picturesque" or this person looks like "this"? If the reader doesn't feel like it's important, then they might skim and feel bored.
                    --> one example(it's not great but u get the point): "I put on my lucky green cap. It had been sitting in my closet for months, accumulating a sense of forgetfulness to the point I let the memories slip by through my fingers. Dad gave this cap to me at our first baseball game, and my green cap was the last thing I had of him since he died."
                    - Basically, you need to show us why it's important if describing things like clothes. If not, it should be used as a visualization technique so that the reader can actually immerse themself in the story.
                    --> This goes for your description of the MC's appearance in the game. There are a lot of details at once, but it doesn't make me visualize the appearance in any way. ex. "I was six feet and three inches tall. I had a ripped body of a Jojo character, and my handsome face could smother any woman or man" you get how it feels like a lengthy list of outward character traits. This is something that stays in the writer's notes, instead. In the story, one should focus on a key few traits and describe them to the reader to help visualize the experience.

                    Hope this help :)

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