Detailed Review Request Thread!!
Epyonnn Wow, thanks a lot for the detailed feedback!
I agree with you that it might be a bit weird that after the 10 years gap. The idea crossed my mind but I went against it, thinking that the context of using the diary is mostly for the man to throw his frustration. I hope it was alright though :)
And btw, I'm really surprised that you actually got part of the plot correct haha. It wasn't exactly the same as you mentioned but it was very close :D Does that mean I'm a fan of cliches? :O
May I have the link to your novel? It is a review swap and I'd like to thank you for the feedback :D
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Yoan_Roturier
Lol... there was this trashy story I read. The grammar and overall reasoning was so bad, it was like I was eating a plate of rise with a lot of sand and little stones in it...
It was torture.
Donniedrako15_ no problem, I’m just happy to have helped
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Oookay... I like this kind of thread! =D
So, if someone is willing to give me an honest review, please be my guest!
I'll do only one review for now, as I come back from work late and need time to read, so I'll privilege the one who will do mine if he has one. Otherwise, I'll just take a request.
- Title: Crossing Our Paths
- Genre: Transmigration, Xianxia, Fantasy, Cultivation, BL (PS: if you fear the BL tag, well...don't worry about it, as nothing will happen in the chapters that are published (0-25)) (PPS: You don't have to read ALL the chapters, of course!)
- Synopsis: Ayden, son of Orchar, was just a Free Man of the Plains, a mercenary selling his sword to anyone who wanted to hire him and his friends. It was meant to be a quest like any other, even though it was based on an absurd legend: finding a dragon's egg.
And when they found it - along with the dragons - who would have predicted such a turn of events? Why had he woken up in an unknown forest? These trees were strange, with long, round green trunks, and he could no longer recognize the sky above him. But most of all, how could these men fly on their swords? Cultivation? Ghouls? Demons?
Ayden was going to have to find answers as he continued on his way through this whole new world. And if he couldn't take his eyes off this surprising cultivator sometimes, well...
- Link: Crossing Our Paths
Edel_Li I can do yours if you like. I read the synopsis, and it looks promising. What I can do is read the first three chapters, leave comments when/if I find errors, then leave a full review on here. If you like the review, I can post it to your book. Would you be interested? I’ve done a couple on here already, so if you scroll up, you can see examples of what I’ll do. Reply to this if it is acceptable to you
Sara_Wilcox Oh dear, I would appreciate that! ;)
Please don't go easy on me and do not worry about me! I already know my looong traditional paragraphs will hurt you... xD
I can look at your story if you would like? Just bear in mind that I'm not a native English speaking person, but I'll do my best if you want to!
Thanks!
Epyonnn Thank you so much for pointing out. I didn't proofread my chapters. I'll change it.
SlyHand I'm glad I could help. Here's my link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/non-player-character_20219961506365305
Hello! I come from the other post ( I read @Yoan_Roturier's 1/2 review ) and I'm willing to review another's if you @ me o(￣▽￣)ブ I have only 7 chapters atm.
Title:
True Half
Genre: Fantasy Romance
Synopsis:
"This life and the next, I will love you for eternity."
Would you recognize your True Half?
In the World of Syre, there is an evil game played amongst four kingdoms. Every 30 years, chosen nobles and royalty are gifted with the memory of their past life and an invitation to the game by the Mercy of God. The rules are simple: find your soulmate at all costs.
If you lose, you and your family are cursed to die within the next 12 months. If you win, you are gifted with the highest social class's prosperity and wealth for the rest of your life. There is too much at stake and too much to lose.
What happens when Mira, a lowly peasant girl, receives the invitation to the game? Her journey started only as a quest to save her brother until she discovers that her True Half might instead be the cold-hearted Crown Prince, the playful Duke heir, or the mysterious noble Xith. Twists and turns at every end, this True Half game is unpredictable yet addictive.
She swore on no romance in her past life, and she doesn’t exactly remember her True Half. Find out how Mira, an extraordinary spy turned farmer orphan, finds love and divine secrets in the maze of royal palaces.
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/true-half_19728092005066305
Cover Picture:
(btw if anyone is wondering how to post cover images on the forum, do  )
no space btwn .jpg and )
Edel_Li sure
I appreciate all feedback And don’t worry about privilege unless you like my book. Coins are expensive
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Sara_Wilcox Perfect, I don't have any coins, so this should be good! xD
Which story of yours should I check?
EDIT: Found your link, The Aquarian Crown, all good ;)
I drew a new cover for my book. Can I get some feedback on it?
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Epyonnn I can easily see what the story will be about, so it's cool and easy to read, but the font is too simplistic/standard. It reduces the potential attractiveness level, and it would be better if the font is more of a futuristic style of font (like @Yulainei 's cover) or a tinge of fanciness like Times New Roman. I would also recommend having some shadowing in there and then slap a webnovel's logo to make it look legit.
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SpilledInk
Humm, there are those kind of stories. Although I dislike grammatical errors, I think we shouldn't mock those authors. It requires a lot of investments on their part to write those stories. Time, knowledge, research, and others. You can frown at their mistakes but... hum. Mocking them is disrespectful, even if the author's work is the worst of all, my dear cutie pie Udeju :P
cute eyes cute eyes cute eyes
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Hum, simple sometimes is best. It does indeed show what the story is going to be about. Which is great. Furthermore, if he drew it himself it means it's his own image rights. Which is even better. As for an actual critic, here's my two cents.
To my opinion, it lacks a certain impact. A punch so to say.
That might be due to how cramp the cover is. It is good in a way since it forces people to focus on the important stuff. However, I don't sense this "wow it looks awesome!" vibe. Maybe because it lacks some background image. We only see a dark background with some kind of knight turning his back to the readers (which is cool in my opinion.)
Also, the lack of color might be one of those variables. It does indicate the tone of the book tho. So it's far from being a useless thing. I haven't been through your story yet, so I might come back to that afterward.
The cross is downright well done, as well as the highlighted letters. Clearly tells us what to expect. Although I think you should align those letters to make it look more professional. A neat/clean cover is more attractive in general. Ah! There is also that "Character" size. It looks compressed, I feel out of breath just looking at it. Try to even it out. You could, for example, reduce the size of the white letters but keep the red ones just as big as they are now.
As for those sakura petals in the background.... hum. It's weird. It feels like there are here just to be fillers. To fill in those empty areas.
Overall, it's not a back cover at all. It does what it's here for, but it does lack the "wow" vibe. But that's really hard to do, you have to order a cover from an artist to get that vibe. I think you can leave your cover picture as is, or maybe implement the "letter size" change I talked about.
Hope it helps.
As for the font...hmm, I'll come back to that after reading your story.
Yoan_Roturier i agree with the letter size change. On mobile, you will only see the bottom half of the cover when you click on the book and right now the text does feel a bit overwhelming by itself. Adding some shadows will add dimension to it, which won't be a "wow" punch bu it will add to its texture. I would also refer to the translated works for their covers since they're made by experienced artists of the qidian platform.
Title: Arcana Legends
Genre: Fantasy, Shonen, Action
Synopsis: Naturalism is the power to use arcana to shape the world around you and it's Daimyon's time to learn how to use this power. He enrolls at West Gaia Academy to start this long journey where he meets a shy girl named Kiyonna who holds incredible hidden power and is immediately thrust into protecting her from the dangerous Shadow Walkers. On the brightside Bones "The Spirit Reaper" decided to take him under his wing and train him. He'll protect his friends at any cost unless Bones training kills him first.
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/arcana-legends_19694226705957105
