thesleepywriter my first reviewer gave me 1 star, like what the heck!? Btw. He's a no good peraon afterall. Try to look at my novel and see his nonsense review. Btw. He said that my novel has many grammatical errors but in his review it has grammatical errors too which is too funny to see hahahahah he's looking only on errors of other people but not on himself. https://www.webnovel.com/book/10478601505043005/Saga-of-the-Overgod

      DeJeL Thanks for the great reply and You are correct that this thread isn't created to diss but to teach both readers and authors.

      thesleepywriter That is the problem with most authors these days is looking at the numbers. If 1 rated you 3.5 and 100 rated you 5.0, what would the numbers be? that's what you need to do, fix your novel and make it into something no one can refute. Feel sad on the ratings because no one liked your novel? Work harder, have a goal in mind that will make those that rated you badly change their minds.

      17Sphynx17 If I had to mention one thing I hate it would be a harem, it always fails...

      Heaven_Dream Being salty about a review isn't the best way to refute him, for me as a reader I can tell you three things you should expect when I am writing a review, 1) common mistakes I want you to fix, 2) improvements within the chapter that can be done 3) Missing elements in the story. If someone rated you 1/5 and randomly typed a review without any reason then that guy is just trolling

                DKQ With ratings, i am fine getting 2's or 3's. I would just like to clearly know why.

                I've already received those reviews and they were clear. They didn't like a slice of life story. They were looking for battle/action where mine didn't have those.

                I didn't mislead them into thinking my story had those scenes. But that is the way it works. I don't mind their review.

                But I wouldn't want to just receive a 1 star then seeing you just read 1 or 2 chaps and say you didn't like it period. That is too harsh, might as well not leave a review then. I think all authors are trying to learn to better themselves, no matter what level they are. So it would be helpful to find out why.

                If it was not your cup of tea, then just make that clear. It's easier to understand. But I think giving a 1 star in that regard is also unjustified. My two cents on the matter.

                Re harem, realistically I know its physically impossible to even do. As for harem fantasies, I do want to see how the author even plans on juggling it if he is hell bent on doing it. But so far, those that I have personally read have failed miserably. I don't think NEET technically has a harem. It's the girls that want the MC but the MC isnt actually tricking any of them. Just so happens he is helping them to try to be a good person. So eh.. your mileage may vary on that.

                Re how you review, I would like to know those things you mentioned if i receive a review as well. It is helpful =) Of course, if you really don't like the story, there is no way around it really. =)

                Thanks for the reply. I know not everyone has the same approach as you so we just all have to take it as it comes. =)

                    NineNeatherBird You can't even imagine how I reacted when I read that scene, even though I really do not care that much about this, it just felt wrong, even if it was a female I would still feel bad but the details in that chapter had me thinking for a few hours.

                    17Sphynx17 I used to write on RRL and it was even worse, barely any views on my novel, went up to 30k words before I had to delete all the chapters due to the bad ratings, from my experience it is not about the readers but about how you build up your story, we have many examples available to us such as Tales of Demons and gods which started as a 'Part-time' and continued even though the start had bad ratings. You can never expect the best rating during the start of any novel (except some) because you are 'No one' now, you should aim to be 'That guy that wrote X novel' Which is our goals and that kind of mindset will make you diss on the readers who just hate you for no reason. I can't judge many as I also write articles for University but I can tell you one thing, we are humans, we judge based on what we see for no reason, even I got disrespected for being a bachelor when I handed my article papers and got thrown to the side whenever I wrote what I loved and that is because I want to do this instead of the reader wants me to read this. All I can say is keep your head high brother as this is only the start of an amazing journey for most of us authors and readers. You might think "this reader hates it so I need to remove it" Do not think about it much, we improve with every word we type if we feel like we are missing something you have this forum or the internet to research :100:

                    LuoFeng Small chance of this happening as the create novel is quite new to Qidian on the international version.

                            DKQ Hi Thank you for the reply.

                            I wont delete my work for the ratings if that is the concern =). I just hope that if I do get them, they contain their opinion not just trashing the novel. I'll just report the review if its simply trashing the novel and leave it to admin to sort out. =)

                            Took a week before admin removed a 1 star review on my novel so I do know they consider them if acceptable review or not. =)

                            I dont post to RRL, Wattpad or the like. I only started posting my original work here. I can take criticism as I have worked in the design field/service industry for more than 12 years. So criticism doesnt bug me. They have their reasons. I even understand people not liking my work. =)

                            Anyway, Hope you find original works you can enjoy. I will also continue writing a story that I love/enjoy. =)

                            Thanks @DKQ

                              tooTired nothing is an overkill, I wrote just the main things I see and most of us might see. This is something I wanted to talk about in a very long time because I got sick of seeing Diamonds getting destroyed into tiny worthless fragment due to common mistakes.

                              An example I can talk about is the system. It is a great idea and something I love but why does every single author repeat the same mistake? Numbers that don't make a difference 1 chapter later, Skills that are never used, copying a game skill and not using it in a way that it is supposed to be used.

                              Points to think about before writing a system novel:

                              • Instead of using numbers for attributes why not use letters? (Not everyone is good at math)
                              • Classes are the most important thing in games and systems.
                              • Never create a thousand skills and throw them, focus on one and evolve it
                              • Reputation plays a big part in any system, create a page for it
                              • Always simplify your Character status and do not make it 2 pages long
                              • Every attribute is important, think before you upgrade your character
                              • A level number is indeed important but how about changing it to [Normal 1, Rare 1, Epic 1... God 1...etc]

                              Example Character Status

                              Name: Eden
                              Level: Unique 5
                              Class: Troll
                              Body Skill: Epic 5 [Troll Regeneration XI]
                              Attack Skill: Rare 2 [Troll Combat IV]
                              Soul Skill: God 4 [Troll Fear X]

                              The idea here is simplified, Levels can be from 1-5 with something, Skills can evolve and change name instead of stacking up into several thousand useless skills. Class is what made it possible. If you want to craft you can apply it too by either going 1-2 crafting professions or Jack-Of-All-Trade which means everything.

                              For cultivation novels, I would also recommend going through different paths as most the translated ones include culture, ethnic ideology, and mindset. We can make it based on our cultures too for example including the Greek mythology and based on that we use it to build the story on how they used to be and how they became 'Gods'.

                              Sorry for the long reply again :smile:

                                  DKQ I had the same idea for using letters for attributes. And those things you've pointed out earlier they all made sense, which kinda enlightened me in the Path of Writing. Thanks for the help~

                                      Newbelist Glad it helped, something I would like to mention is before even starting the entire system novel is to think on how the main character will play part in the world or universe if you really want it to be that big.

                                      [Titles is a good yet bad thing, in the long run, let us say you are for example a hero? so we stick with that title or just let go of those titles once in for all. The neater your character sheet is, the easier it is for you as an author and us as readers]

                                          randomgal23 some points in the first chapter, I was lost, utterly lost until I started reading the comments which may or may not answered what I was thinking about. First of all, I would not judge based on the first 2 chapters as I have no idea what this is about. Second is the first chapter should be the synopsis as it is short (my weakness to reading novels) and it's quite amazingly tidy (to me). Third I would recommend answering some comments on the first chapter as this might leave someone to give you a bad review for reasons such as 'Badly planned' due to barely understanding the beauty of art you have created.

                                          After reading both chapters three times I will give you my basic summary:-

                                          Spoiler summary

                                          • The girl protagonist is special, either she is too powerful or contains something special
                                          • The world is a medieval world with complicated hierarchy system [Based on the protagonist full name and what is mention during the second chapter "Duke of Deatony"]
                                          • The idea of a sharpened hidden dagger intrigues me but as I said its still 2 chapters.
                                          • Rich female protagonist? That is quite great as we don't need to go through the getting rich process
                                          • Hated the part of her being hunted! cliffhanger kills me you know?!
                                          • You mentioned she is a phantomive? I am quite confused as I only know phantom which means a hidden entity of some sorts, let's say she is the secret WMD (Weapon of Mass Destruction) related to the family, wasn't it dumb for the father to search for her? So it means she also has problems within the family and she is somewhat dangerous to herself and others around her.

                                          This is just a part of what I understood but really the first chapter still confuses me, if it is your first novel then I applause to you for the amazing tidy yet complicated novel. This can become a mystery novel to some and a pain to others. I vote 4.0 out of 5 [First chapter -1] Will not review now but after you reach 50 chapters as I am a very bored person. Good luck and sorry if you hate me for this review :cry: Keep up the good work!

                                              Cobyboy Hello friend!, let us first talk about the main issue which I talked about at the start of this thread, Text-walls. It was a good read learning about the history of the team members during the first chapter but reading the names and their achievements basically made me have some headache, as you are the author I would point this out first and even write an entire paragraph on why I excluded everything except this during the first chapter but before I even began let us go through the summary of the greatness of chapter 1 [Got me hyped!]

                                              Spoiler Summary of chapter 1

                                              • We have met the team, each member has his greatness and each has his weakness
                                              • Modern type story [+1] Nothing complicated and all planned out
                                              • Young protagonist (based on the gaming world) and old team members
                                              • Reference usage of [The King's Avatar] made me happy
                                              • Benefits of being young and having a quick reaction speed make the protagonist great
                                              • The cliffhanger? well placed!

                                              Text wall +/-

                                              • Characters introduced [+]
                                              • Why they hated the protagonist [+]
                                              • Age and description of the team [+]
                                              • Too much information to process in the long term [-]
                                              • Side characters are given more than they deserve [-]
                                              • Skipping through the description as I felt it was too much [-]

                                              Let us keep it there as I really can't explain it further without reading the next few chapters. Where do I begin with the story itself, the idea is amazing as it involves game elements. We can go through this by breaking up the second chapter and going through the summary again! (Might have to start doing this normally :) )

                                              Spoiler chapter 2

                                              • Transmigration is a plot twist, and that caught me off guard
                                              • Occupying another body with the owner of the body still there? You deserve a medal
                                              • Cultivation world with 24 races, humans being the weakest among them
                                              • Those side characters I mentioned for some reason failed to disappear (Tch) I smell a conspiracy
                                              • Smart Protagonist that obtained a body of another race

                                              Let us conclude the final 2 chapters into two parts, Retribution which mean the villains have been decided from the beginning of the story (Turns out those idiots became too powerful for their own good) and it also made the story a bit restorative (Instead of having a weak mc we are given an mc that can stand up to his own). This creates a balance between both sides and that is the most important thing in any novel.

                                              For Definition of Retribution and Restorative :

                                              • Retributive justice is a theory of justice that holds that the best response to a crime is a punishment proportional to the offense, inflicted because the offender deserves the punishment. Prevention of future crimes (deterrence) or rehabilitation of the offender is not considered in determining such punishments.
                                              • Restorative justice is an approach to justice that personalizes the crime by having the victims and the offenders mediate a restitution agreement to the satisfaction of each, as well as involving the community.

                                              Do not think about it too much as this is mostly academic materials, it's just the idea I had when I was reading the first two chapters. Wrote too much again sorry about that :cry: Good luck and keep up the good work

                                                  DKQ Hey man, any chance you'd check out my novel? I'm pretty happy with it, but the synopsis always has me cringing and I just can't make it better without giving out too many spoilers. My readers seem to like the story as I have received very little criticism, I just think that the synopsis doesn't make a lot of people interested in checking it out. The novel is:

                                                  https://www.webnovel.com/book/10344815206012705/Cultivating-Civilization

                                                  • DKQ replied to this.

                                                      DKQ thank you for you review XD im glad you've read it.... I'm actually planning to make it less confusing in the next chapter, probably a better understanding of what Caia really is... Sorry it was confusing XD Actually I placed it in the wrong genre and it is considered as a mystery/thriller genre... I will try my best to make it up till fifty chapter XD

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