Camira_Ja So, honestly, you are not portraying the book properly, I got confused at some point, Grammatical errors won't stop a good book from being good, so focus on how you can portraying the book, first understand how you character feels; for instance the part where she was angry about the toilet I couldn't feel it, so I can say "if you can feel the anger you can write down the anger" does this make sense? okay I hope this helped? you can make your story better, Just like who wants to make my own book better, you can make yours good too.

      @popular_ruki Hi! I noticed you are providing an actual honest opinion of others' work. Would you be interested to do an actual constructive review swap in the book itself with me?
      If it's not what you're after, either way let me know! Cheers!

        popular_ruki I have been on many platforms before I came here, already tried for contracts etc. And received some huge rejections. It didn't help that my book was on like 100views while other had 1m or even 1b.
        But than I realized, it's my book, my story I want to tell.
        Writting brings me happines and if my story gets only a few views...who cares?
        And from that day on it's better.
        I writte with confidence and optimism, still read many books on my e-library, search for new plot twists eetc.
        Since english is not my first language I really am proud of my book that received 10k views in 2weeks.
        One day I might become a proffesional writter, who knows. But until than, I will continue writting for my soul 😁❤

            vesnxx You are right on that, no matter what kind of rejections or criticism you get just keep moving forward at least in the end you will know that you have written something you always wanted to write, it will gonna give you a pleasure that you could express something that most people take it as a privilege that they can't ever have, be proud to be a writer ^-^.

                Jaison_Arbor exactly 🙂 and thank you, I am proud, even though some days its harder that others, but in the end its worth it. If nothing else I manage to empty my head that is buzzing with ideas sometimes 🤣🤣

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