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In the synopsis there is a 3 choices about
Dungeon Master
Dungeon Conqueror
Dungeon Explorer
It really leaves nice feeling of options, however in many cases in these stories MC just picks something without justifying the choice at all or they just pick at random while being OP master geniuses and it could of been done in any other way. Keep the choices real and the story is more complex and relatable at the same time that is typically hard to do. I like the use of writen tag genres, helps a bit with the system not having all of then in Wn. I think Im going to steal this idea thanks.
Game system related novel things, if nothing much changes it would be better not to spam the MC status window all copy paste details every time MC looks at the status. I know status is important feature of these kind of stories but it is same time one of the biggest fillers that reader sees through if it doesn't have substantial change that would actually lead to some contemplation or new discovery. And above all when I listen to some robot audio book light novel on my soffa.. THE LAST thing is what I want to hear is same status stats 9999 times. It makes it impossible to listen to. Now there are many opinions about these things, some dont like that some people make robot audios of their novels and some even ask for it. Im not locking my stories out because it would receive less readers and If I write hundreds and thousands chapters then probl readers are more willing to help with the donations while being fair and giving free thousand of chapters for someone who likes them. It doesn't always convert into money but keeping the novel open is definitelly rising the amount of readers tremendously. You can always make books later and publish them in old fashion way if money is so important. (Ok end of rant and back to the story )
Damn 1 chapter ends and another begins with same copy paste status without main person even opening it or something. Otherwise dialogue mostly with system for understandable reason is ok. Writing flow is ok, could explain world or surroundings more or contemplate it more since MC is in new environment. Nice lust going on chapter 14. Oh the harem update needs the whole status window to be written again damn I should of known. My arc enemy the useless status window. Okay and there is missions. So I have said about the missions somewhere probl but I tell it again because this is clearly more game motivated system. If you keep forcing quest without any choices to MC it will create this loop tunnel vision where character is predeterminedly going about in the world and just brainlessly doing the quests and ofc achieving them somehow always because otherwise story would end or stall so badly that nobody would want to read it. The "NEW OPTION" would be to give MC choice based quests or pool of quests where he can make what he deems better for him. Not this hey go to another side of the world MC kill rats from the cellar of my aunt and then come back to reveive 10 gold coins oh the travelling cost 50.000 gold coins not my problem prompted the system
STATUS WINDOW
MC name: Generic MC name
MC Class: MC sword idiot MC
999999999 STR
0 INT
20 VIT
800 fucks given
Harem members: Furious and trying to kill MC because of jealousy
Skills
Appreciate beauty: opens the drooling function
Lands owned
None
Titles hold
The most MC ever MC MC
Relations to the king
MC Boosted bs with unrealistic stuff
Status Status window bonus
Status on MC: fuck im tired of the MC dont talk to me MC, just do the damn quest slave MC as I order it hahehahuho Im a system. Bliib bloob
(Just comedic ending gathered all the frustration of the systems stories. I really like a good systems stories but there is so much something else entirely). Hope the tips were helpful