mahe_ale_aba I suggest that you continue using the dialogue as a method to move the story forward, also make sure that your readers can understand difficult terms early on in the story.

      mahe_ale_aba I read your work. It has many grammatical error. No dialogue tags. Was it intentional? Alsi about the first chapter, the one that has webnovel link n all.. You should delete it

          mahe_ale_aba use grammarly, it will help you with punctuation and grammar. You can use its chrome extension or the app. It works fine for both laptop n phones plus it's free.

              mahe_ale_aba I can write a general review but wouldn't it be better if I write a detailed review after reading at least 3 chapters?
              What do you say?

                  mahe_ale_aba

                  I checked it, still 1 eps but the story is nice,
                  Some points;
                  First use grammerly, too many grammer mistakes and sentance structure is also not right.
                  Second use " " when someone is talking ' ' for thoughts and also i noticed you didn't use punctuation that also not good! Its okh if it's hard cuz i m also not good at it, but to make less mistakes try to make your sentence Smaller like,

                  [I was enjoying the comfort of my soft quilt, its warmth hugged my skin lightly. I was sleeping peacefully when Madam Beryl entered my room.

                  "Good morning Your Highness." She said in her very cheerful voice.]

                  That's it, I would have pinpoint more and reviewed but there was only one chp.
                  Also,
                  All the Best Keep it up. 💝

                      Rosessete I'll do it! If you have some coins and willing to spend on my chaps! We can do a review swap! What do you think?

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