_Mad_Scientist_
You're a new writer, right? Then, be happy, because this story is good. Though, I think it's better you learn about boys more to portray them better. Men don't commit that easily, unless... there's a catch. I also noticed you're not used to English, huh? Some of your word choices (especially in the dialogue) are still awkward and clunky. Tried to read it a loud and you notice it right away. Good work, waiting for the next chapter!

      B_DRAG
      Wait, I'll mark your story and just finished the first 5 chapters. I review it after I finish reading an arc, because it's good.

          Rane_Writes
          Please tell me in the forum if you finished revising the first chapter, and I'll visit again. Don't forget to check the notes I marked on your chapter.

              Origins_Ancestor
              I still find it hard to understand the story, but I kind of get the gist of it and it's good. The problem lies in so many bulky sentences, oh no... Please separate the sentence with (.) not (,). If you finished revising, please tell me. I'll visit again.

                  RomanceFanatic028
                  I read it up to the first 5 chapters in no time. It's so easy to read and the plot is really captivating. Ah, if only I don't have to go to the hospital tomorrow, I would binge-read your novel. I don't really have a comment about your style, it's really good for web novel format. But, you tend to forget to capitalize. When I finished the first plot, I'll give the full review. Anyway, can I pinch Emily's cheek? She's adorable.

                      PEARL_WANG
                      Hey, it got real potential. I like it honestly, but at some part of chapters, it got drag on a little to much. Perhaps you could focus in the main plot before giving it complication too early?

                          Huiyin_ing
                          No problem in the grammar, and it's fun to read. Although the main MCs are too bratty and arrogant for my taste haha. I can't read more than 3 chapter because I can't seem to like the main MCs.

                              Elementary519
                              It's nice to read, but the clunky paragraph made it hard to read. If you revised it, please tell me in this forum and I'll read it again. Hopefully, this time I can pass through the first chapter.

                                  HairySquid
                                  It's really good, I like the MC and how natural her reaction when got transmigrsted. I made suggestion in your comment, but really, a month and just 2 chapters? Hahaha, please update more frequently.

                                      HairySquid
                                      Oooh, sorry, I mistook you for someone else (ﾉ≧ βˆ€ ≦)οΎ‰. Please keep up the good work! Write till the first plot end and then revised it, you'll progress better that way.

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