Out of Existence

Out of Existence

A journey of a man through the history of another world, from its creation up to its end.

A journey to a new universe, discovering how other universes were made and it's corresponding universal laws, how worlds were made and came to be.

The story is full of misunderstandings, as to show how every individual has a unique world.

The story contains, sword and magic, technological advancement, gods and their unique intances, life lessons, and bland humor.
Link: Out of Existence

    I only have a couple of chapters online and I know it's not everyone's cup of tea but if you do choose to review mine, please be honest, I could only improve if by honest reviews.

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    She is a commoner, but there is nothing at all common about her. Her beauty seems to rise from the earth like a phoenix rises from the ashes. It didn’t take long before the royal men noticed her. She was courted by all kinds of men from the common people to dukes and even princes, they came from all over the world to ask her hand in marriage. Yet she refused all.
    Cecily never believed she could become royalty until she laid eyes on a young royal prince, who’s token of love would put her behind bars.

      Wow, I just left for work and there are so many books. Let's see...

        CosmicQuill
        I read the first 5 chapters with ease. It was enjoyable and relaxing, I like it so much. Unless I point out, there's no real problem with the writing. But seriously, is the MC really 2 years old? 2 years old brat is barely able to walk, hahaha. Gonna read it more when I have time, thank you.

            ShadexRay
            Hmm, this is the first time I read a story that has 3 MCs. The dynamic bickering between the three is fun to read. But as a cultivation novel, the problem starts with what is their reason for seeking power? As a reader, I would like to read a more dire and important reason for that, not solely for appeasing curiosity.

                Title: Ascension of Elden
                Genre: Urban Fantasy
                Tags: # ACTION # ADVENTURE # MAGIC # APOCALYPSE # EVOLUTION # URBAN # RAREBLOODLINE # BLOODPUMPING # NO-HAREM

                Synopsis: From the depths of the Earth, a Great Chasm erupted, bridging continents once separated. This cataclysmic event unleashed mysterious Essence energies, bestowing otherworldly powers upon those who could master them. However, those who mishandled Essence faced the risk of transforming into corrupted monsters.

                Five centuries have passed since the Great Chasm's emergence. The world has adapted to utilizing—and warring over—the powers of Essence. Monstrous beasts rise from the chasm's depths, endangering civilization, yet humanity tenaciously clings to hope.

                Elden leads a humble, solitary life. None know he harbors a dark secret—a corrupted spirit that is stirred whenever he channels the raw Essence of the chasm within him. Yet above all, Elden wishes for nothing more than peace.

                However, destiny has other plans for him. Will he embrace his dark side to protect himself? As he grapples with controlling his corruption, he ponders—does he even hold a soul worth saving?

                Elden's journey to find his own redemption will reveal the hidden history of the Great Chasm and its mysterious connection to the fate of humanity. His quest to contain the chaos within himself may hold the key to containing the much greater chaos threatening to consume the world.

                Link: Ascension of Elden

                  HeatherReader
                  Umm, I don't have much to say, because I rarely read an adult novel. But the sex scene is really good, it's easy to imagine. But the problem lies with the flow of the story. It's confusing, I was lost frequently and needed to recheck the paragraph before to show where I was. Well, good work, Author!

                      mahe_ale_aba
                      Thank you, it was enjoyable. I really like the dynamic between princess and the characters around her, especially Orion. But the grammar errors and writing technique make it hard to read (especially chapter 1). It's okay, it takes time to truly integrate your mother language and english. With practice, it would be much better I'm sure.

                        Heartwill_Abledu_k
                        Thank you, I could only finish two chapters on your story. The world-building is intriguing, I like it. However, it feels like reading a report rather than a story. The information clumped together in one paragraph, and then the next one there is new lore again. It makes me confused about the flow of story. Perhaps you could focus on story first, then world-building next?

                            JA_Chrysant
                            Ohh... I'm sorry for the little error.
                            Title: A night Copulation with the billionaire.

                                B_DRAG
                                I finished reading 5 chapters. I'd like to continue a bit before telling the full review hehe.

                                    DARK_DEKU
                                    Hmmm, I don't know. It feels robotic to be honest. The flow of the story is flat (it's only consisted of character conversation devoid any real meaning/problem), without background and world-building. The first 5 character should include the premise (what's the main problem, what's MC attitude toward it, why MC must pursue it), some world-building (at least the school, the house, or the town, or the power) and antagonist. There's none there.

                                        mahe_ale_aba
                                        I already did. Though, I left the review here because it will be really harsh to put it on the book when it's still not cooked enough.

                                            Ninestar619_5803
                                            The premise and story are good. Can't wait to see The Emperor get his revenge! But the glaring problem is most of the time, you're not using the right English words (Though I can understand what you mean because I read a lot). The grammar is good tho.

                                                Hello, my book is teen fiction. Though most of the characters are teenagers. Just like I'm so I'm still learning to write mature books. However, I'd love someone to tell me how everything is. I'm not an English speaker so my grammars might be _quite....😂

                                                http://wbnv.in/a/8ahgUr5

                                                  Xero_5825
                                                  It's goood, very good! Finally, someone writes a good prologue and first 5 chapters well. I like the world-building and how you introduced the side characters. But for the MC, you seemed to restraint his character so much. Why?

                                                      JA_Chrysant Maybe cuz you are reading a book that's being mass edited right now.
                                                      Anyways, thx for review. I will make sure to checkout your book in free time.

                                                          Behemot
                                                          Your novel will depend a lot on your MC. Most of the readers would like a happy but dorky character like Kumoko, I think.

                                                              _Mad_Scientist_
                                                              You're a new writer, right? Then, be happy, because this story is good. Though, I think it's better you learn about boys more to portray them better. Men don't commit that easily, unless... there's a catch. I also noticed you're not used to English, huh? Some of your word choices (especially in the dialogue) are still awkward and clunky. Tried to read it a loud and you notice it right away. Good work, waiting for the next chapter!

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