Elude do you mind reviewing mine? i've heard you reviewed a lot of novels honestly, i think i also need one. there are only seven chapters tho.

    yosi

    When you end a sentence, use a space after the period.
    " end. I " example.

    If your asking a question, even if in novels, use a question mark.

    Please use commas.

    On the phone, so i cant pick apart your story to a further degree, but you should look into getting an editor.

    I like the idea and look forward where you take it

      BerriApplepi maybe not use "( )" in your story >-<

      You can put your thoughts at the end, because im not sure if those are the character thoughts or youts.

        MeloncholyKay Oh! Okay! Thank you โ‰งโˆ‡โ‰ฆ It's actually the character's but I'll go change it. ๐Ÿ˜Š

          MeloncholyKay
          I've read a few paragraphs and I think its nice. I would love to read it.

            Overlord_Venus
            Had to stop reading. Please put spaces after commas. ",". If you're on a computer with english settings crtl+ f. Search using , or . Then hit the space bar it should highlight the entered stuff

              Adraik Sorry man, but i had a hard tine getting through ththe beggining. I ended up rearranging sentences in my head>.< one particular annoyance was the beggining, the present speak then jumping to past tense.

              Annoyance was when he entered the room and you used - - instead of commas. I suggest running it through grammarly

              Another was "The Royal Family Castle"
              It should be "the Royal Family's castle" " 's" for a single entity's posession etc

              I cant pick it apart in detail, as im on my phone, but maybe when i do ill go into detail

                BerriApplepi make sure have it downloaded then you need to have a link to the server. Inkstone has a link in the bottom left corner

                As for mobile idk

                  Elude how do I get people to read my book "Superfail"? The one review I got said nothing about the book. PS can you check out my book?

                    BerriApplepi Grammarly salesperson here. If you want to improve your grammar, try out that service to start with, it's free :grin:

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