Xyphon_Storm Wowww, thatβs awesome dedication! Really respect your perseverance to keep going.
I had a quick look and your writing is good! Language is perfect with proper grammar, etc, with clear descriptions of every setting. Not sure why the response rate is so low.
Maybe a bit of rebranding with a new exciting cover, book title and synopsis? And from what Iβve read in 3 chapters, yours requires a bit more immersive reading, so some scenes need to have a different, more urgent feel to it like the fight scenes so that thereβs variations in pacing.
Keep going and donβt give up! πππ