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review done! I liked your story! Also, you asked for feedback so here it is:
Your story is great but I think you should edit your chapters to fix some minor flaws in the narrative. For example:
Chapter 1:
Its a great chapter but the numbers seems odd, 1 million feet? 500 million feet? This beasts are of gargantuan size. And the locals don't find this strange?
They just go on with their lives and say "hey look at the deities gathered over there" like that is the important thing and ignore the appearance of the damn huge dragon that is as big as to cover the entire sky with his shadow.
If I were to see a beast like that suddenly appear I will surely show a reaction. Scream, ran away,faint, stare at it, I don't know exactly what reaction it would be but I would definitely show my emotions somehow. The locals should also do it. Even if you plan to kill them all in a couple of paragraphs later, at least make the reader feel like they were alive in the first place.
Also even if the dragon's numbers are correct, its still better to give a description than to show numbers unless the mc is a reincarnated person from a modern world with a chip to measure everything.
Chapter 9:
Also a great chapter and the joke is good but mentioning steroids threw me off, I thought this was an ancient world so why the mc suddenly know about steroids?
Replace the words"likes steroids" with "likes alchemy potions" or "like bloodline pills" or something like that. Also, in the subsecuent line replace the words "doing steroids" with "faking your strengh with forbbiden ways" or whatever you prefer.
Chapter 12: mexican standoff? There is even Mexico in this ancient world?
These examples are the kind of thing that you need to change to improve your story. Its a great novel already but it could be better if you fix these minor flaws. Hope you find the feedback useful! Keep up the good work!