Hi people! This thread is growing steadily ! Glad to meet all the shameless colleagues here.

@WinterBud I finally did the review of your novel. Although i did not read the whole story yet, i do read it until chapter 15 to have a broad enough look at the story. I like it ! I am still reading the rest of the chapters but i wanted to enjoy the story as a reader and that why I decided to review it today. Your story is right on track anyway and you already have a lot of feedback of your readers. The chapter you ended with SCUMM! shout made me laugh a lot.

@Eslyna @ArthurHFSS @NatsumeRikka You people are the next on my queue of pending reviews! I will try to review your work as soon as possible!

    Fuck it I really want feedbacks on my novel so I'll post it here hopefully anyone would check it out

    TL;DR synopsis - A renowned hitman betrayed by his partner while on a mission. Protag got sent to another world where sword and magic prosper and treacherous beast roam the land. Sent to the other world without so much as a reason or even a cheat power not only that his power upon his birth was not even remotely close to average. How will a person who only knows how to kill navigate through this world?

    Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12752686705059805

    Cheers!

      @NatsumeRikka @GabrielDetchans Left a review for your novels. Really interested in both, keep up the good works!

      I'll use this thread to shamelessly promote myself as well!
      A warning at the start: It is a Fan-Fiction novel.

      Douluo Dalu - The Story of Sheng Feilong

      Synipsis:
      A Douluo Dalu Fanfiction in the timeline of DD3 (The Legend of the Dragon King).

      Follow Sheng Feilong, a young boy from the Sheng Clan, on his way to become a powerful Soul Master.

      Watch him grow up, train, make friends and enemies alike, in, arguably, one of the most interesting worlds of chinese webnovels.

      Will the outcast of a small Clan be able to break through humanity's limit and ascend to become a god?

      Link >> https://www.webnovel.com/book/12199865805072905

        I am shamelessly reviewing random novels from this thread... if you see my review, kindly give me a click and a review..you dont even have to read my entire book...tut tut, wink. Happy almost weekend fellow web-novelist

        @ArthurHFSS Review completed! Your novel is really great! The only thing it is lacking its more promotion! Just select some of the people in this thread and talk to them to trade reviews so they would promote your novels.

        Also, and I am only pointing this because you said you want feedback, your synopsis could be better.

        You do have a great start in prologue and first chapter with Earth destroyed by tentacles, so why don't use that in your synopsis. Write it in a little more agressive way. For example:

        "Damn tentacled monsters! First they destroyed the Academy. Then they destroyed the Protectorade. Finally, the whole Earth! And that was just graduation day! Can John survive his first day as the interim captain of a broken spaceship?

        Armed only with his dubious expertise and a worn out Terrene Protectorate Field Guide, he will have to avoid the tentacles trying to kill him, repair his ship, protect the symbol of a defunct organization and find out the responsibles of the destruction of Earth before he can even start to think about revenge.

        Oh boy! How much he wished he had paid more attention instead of sleeping on his bench during those all those lessons at the academy!"

        Something like that. I hope you find it useful. You are entitled to ignore my advice if you dont like it.

          @NatsumeRikka Dear, I already reviewed your story. First of all, I want to say that like your story very much.Its very well written. But there is something I feel that you need to adress. A minor flaw in chapter 3 that can be easily fixed.

          Since you stated that this is modern world, in actual Earth, this chapter has some credibility issues. And I am not talking about reincarnation. Also, I love Yi Lan and I understand that she is really tough and a complete badass.

          However, a highschool girl won a fight against 20 burly man at the same time? And then she walked away after being shot twice? Don't you think its a bit too much? I feel that you should at least give a reasonable explanation for the mc to have this kinds of abilities. After all its a novel in the magical realism genre and not in fantasy.

          Martial Arts won't cut it because you stated that she is living in the real actual world. Unless she is a cyborg or a cultivator or something powerful like that there is simply no way she could do those things. So you either remove the modern world tag you putted at the first chapter or you have to include a paragraph to explain her superhuman resistance and abilities.

          For example, something like this:

          "Since Yi Lan was born she had more strengh than normal people. The reality was that she had bones denser than average due to an excess of calcium, her skin was thicker than normal by an aditional layer and her kidney glands constantly generated a small amount of adrenaline. While medical science struggled to find a reasonable explanation for this anormalities, fortunately her family could provide her with the drugs needed to keep her condition in check.

          However Yi Lan did not care about these things. What she did cared about was that she could summon a great deal of strengh at will and it was damn useful on the fights. Of course, her parents and siblings worried a lot about this. Specially since they found out that because her pain threshold was a lot superior that normal people it was common to her to ignore all wounds until it was too late."

          Hope you will find this feedback and suggestions useful. Again, I love your story. you definitely got yourself a new reader. Keep up the good work!

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