Detailed Review Request Thread!!
I'm a new strand in this thread who would love an honest review.
Title: Devil Child
Genre: Fantasy, Action, Adventure
Autistic and alone, Noe begins a new life at a mysterious school. Trapped in a sea of faceless people, prejudice, and pain, he has no choice but to learn to coincide with evil. In the small town of Westville, at a school erected within the heart of chaos, the incredible power that Noe possesses is awakened.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/devil-child_19990523105255605
Yoan_Roturier Hey! I know this is a thread for review swipes, but I would like to be your editor.
DM me if you are interested. Prikkrang#6083 is my discord id.
Yoan_Roturier Hey! I know this is a thread for review swipes, but I would like to be your editor.
DM me if you are interested. Prikkrang#6083 is my discord id.
Yoan_Roturier
Hey! I know this is a thread for review swipes, but I would like to be your editor.
DM me if you are interested. Prikkrang#6083 is my discord id.
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@MimiTea Alright. I've read all the chapters so far. It's a good start, and I see literally nothing wrong, except for one nitpick: try not to repeat nouns and adjectives within the same two paragraphs. As a rudimentary example, someone might say, "Open this door!" Then, the first line in the next paragraph may say, "The child opened the door." It doesn't affect the reading too much, but placing two instances word "door" in close proximity leads to some choppiness. Sometimes, the sentence can fall apart if you start substituting words, so just keep in mind sentence variety (which you already do well, for the most part).
Since it's only the beginning of the story, I really have nothing else to say other than to keep up the good work. Let me know when you have more chapters, and I'll give them a critique as well.
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I am back... here... with some suggestions... again.
I can see that some people really spend their time trying to help... @Epyonnn great work!
@Yoan_Roturier too.
sooo... at least we could give him/her a few power stones ;)
I am not going to corrupt anyone, but I think that's a nice way for telling 'thank you for your precious time'
Hi! I don't have the means nor the time to engage in a partnership with an editor at the moment, but I'll remember your offer— if need be—when I do have them. Plus, I don't really know you for now.
Thank you for taking an interest in my work (assuming you read it).
Epyonnn Hello, I liked the way you gave a review. I need your help with my first ever novel, cuz I am not getting any reviews and I don't know whether I should continue that novel or make some changes in the plot.
Name: Mysterious Destiny of Us
Genre: Fantasy Romance, time travel
Synopsis:
She said,
"Fate is nothing but a question which the Deity throws, the answer to it is the choices we make..."
He asked,
"Then what about Destiny??"
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Simple minded, focused, a bit nerdy Su Yeon's life changes slowly but mysteriously when she join hands with a Doctor who is also a part of underworld and her life gets tangled with someone whom she never expected. Will she choose this life over her simple and stable life or may be she is destined to it??
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Excerpt 1:
"I don't know anything else! From now on you are my Girlfriend and that is final! We will keep it secret, I will not disturb you and wait for you so you can pursue your career. But you will always be mine!"
Excerpt 2:
He was standing in the corner, looking at a girl who was enjoying with her colleagues, for whom he was waiting for more than 4 years. he whispered, "I think its enough of waiting now, it's time for us to be together. Little Bunny, will you accept me this time?"
Book Link: https://m.webnovel.com/book/mysterious-destiny-of-us_20101912606657405
Any criticism is accepted as I don't know what readers thought about my novel.
Shreya2711 Sure thing. I got you.
Epyonnn Hey! I just finished the first 10 chapters of your book, and I will say I will be keeping in my library 
Now, for my review, I would like to give you two choices because I wrote a lot of detailed notes that are not sugarcoated at all. The first option is to get the non-sugarcoated version with my direct, honest thoughts. The second option is a less direct but still honest approach, but it might take me a little longer to write up. What do you think?
modestbaddie Hey your novel seems interesting and it's totally my type! Historical timetravel romance! I have added it to my library and I am currently reading it so I will post the review soon! I hope you will do the same with my book since my genre is also fantasy romance!!!