honest review please? I've read Yoan's Woodcutter novel and reviewed a while back lol~ (it's still in my library)
But if anyone is up for an honest review on my BL novel, please let me know. I shall do the same for you.
I've just stared so it's still in the early stage _~
- Title: QT: Lazy Prince Becomes Protagonist with a System
- Genre: LGBTQ+, fantasy, comedy, romance
- Synopsis:
Shun had been a lazy prince most of his life. The fifth of 7 siblings, he was free to do as he pleased. Until he died and was swept away to wake up in a new world.
What is this stupid system thing and why is it telling him to do the mission or people die?!
What the hell?! He was no knight!
It had to be a witch’s doing to make him work!

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Vol. 1- Idol Popstar
Shun had to hit the 100% Star Meter to return back to his kingdom. However, being an idol was hard work, but thanks to that witch of a system, he was forced to finish.
No way was he going to let people die!
So working hard and making friends, Shun found himself infatuated with Suu Jin, an idol prince that stole his heart and his first kiss.
Would Shun be distracted by the beauty of Suu Jin to complete his tasks? Would he want to leave this world to return to his old one?

For Suu Jin, he had done everything the world asked of him. He was a puppet dangled in front of the audience, but what they did not know was his past covered by NDAs. Would his flaws be spread out for everyone to see? Would Shun accept him? Would they ever get together?

*Rated 18+ for later volumes/chapters
- Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/qt-lazy-prince-becomes-protagonist-with-a-system_20496998405848805
- Cover picture: alernatetext

    Who wants an honest review swap
    Title: The do-over
    Genre: Realistic Fiction
    Synopsis:
    Sometimes you just have to do things for just you regardless of what other people think because you just might not get the chance to have a do-over.
    Andrew is a guy who had to be a doctor in order not to let his mother down. But deep down he wanted to be something else but he didn't have the courage to tell his mother no. Later he finds out his life isn't the fairytale he thought it was.

    https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-do-over_20234475205317705###

    • Jo_J replied to this.

      Epyonnn Thank you! I did try to express in the latter chapters that the problem at first was the protag's character but I guess I need to make it more apparent. My inital plan was to start dealing with the protagonist's personality since most novels I read about shut-ins just basically transform the whole character after they transmigrated.

      I appreciate the input and will work on it, you're doing good work here! Again, thanks a lot!

        @Yulainei I've only read the first chapter so far, and I have quite a few things to say about it. I'll probably do another review for the later chapters if there are any glaring issues.

        1. Prose

        Good word choices and stuff, but you tend to repeat certain words multiple times within close proximity of each other, making the sentences choppy. In the first paragraph, you used "rain" three times (I'm counting the instance of rain in the word rainfall). In the second paragraph, you used "up" twice. These are a nitpicky thing, but your sentences will flow much better if you use more word variation. This is why English has a million synonyms for almost every word.

        Another thing is that there are some incomplete sentences and some that are weirdly worded, making them hard to follow.

        2. Omniscient POV

        Be careful when writing in the third-person omniscient POV because things might get confusing if you switch to another character's POV. In the chapter, you switched from Nicolaus to the driver, but make sure that you clarify who is who. Give Nicolaus a distinctive feature instead of just calling him "that guy" or "that man." When the POV shifted, I wasn't sure who the speaker was, and who the speaker was referring to until I read a couple more paragraphs.

        Also, make sure that you don't reveal too many of the thoughts in other characters' heads, especially if they're not one of the main characters.

        Finally, you mainly write in the past tense, but sometimes, it changes to the present tense. Just stick to the past tense.

        Tragic Backstory

        Yes, Nicolaus may have a tragic backstory, but it doesn't feel impactful if it's narrated. Instead, it might be better to cut the narration altogether and just leave the MC with the feeling of rage and keeping it a mystery as to why he was angry.

        Then, in the next chapter, maybe you could have the MC floating through time, watching the events of his past life unfold before him. With that, it would really cement the reason why the MC will no longer tolerate people who mess with him.

        This is only one suggestion, and there are many ways to handle it. You can even sprinkle in his backstory while he in his new body.

        That's about it so far. I'll probably keep reading to see where it goes.

          Epyonnn thank you so much bro... Indeed, but the driver is a main plot in the story. xD

            Grand_Void_Daoist

            Edit (after thinking a bit more about it):

            What's your take on it?

            I'm thinking about leaving this "unlocked" for now. Creating a new thread might be a bad idea since it's not a pinned thread. People who need help with their novels still come by from time to time and I fear that it might be jarring for them to create a new thread. At least for now. Maybe next month tho.

            Moreover, it's not that popular either. And I think I should change the title to "Detailed Review" instead of "Honest Review" since it does discredit the.... original "Review Swap Thread." But... I don't know how to do that xD.

                Jo_J yeah no problem
                I just want to see how I can make my novel better

                    Title : Ghost Busters

                    Genre : Urban(Male-leading)

                    Synopsis : A guy going by the name of Felix joins the team known as 'Ghost Busters' because of an invitation. A team consisting of 6 members.

                    Nobody knew his past, nor his personal info. Even his name Felix was an alias created by himself. What was about to come? Was the decision to invite him was correct or everything will crumble?

                    Felix embarks on his journey along with his new team to unveil the secrets and mysteries of the world, including his own past too.

                    However, there was another secret to it. Something related to him. Something which defied the laws.

                    Join Felix on his journey to explore the eerie, unreal, and perilous side of the world as he uncovers the mysteries one by one.

                    Link : https://m.webnovel.com/book/ghost-busters_20322367305200405

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                      @Mayemura I've still been reading through Yulanei's book, so I'll get to yours eventually. I looked through your first chapter, and there are quite a lot of grammar mistakes and some spelling errors. Try to start by correcting those.

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