@McWms99
-Something I still struggle with; it looks much fancier when actions precede words or reactions come after them within the same paragraph. Not in two separate ones. Let me show you:
He looked behind him, âSorry,â he said, not really meaning it.
Looks better than:
He looked behind.
âSorry,â he said not really meaning it.
-For someone with grown children, the father doesnât know one wife can sew like a pro and the other is a manipulative being... But then heâs wise enough to carry out the perfect punishment⌠was kind of inconsistency for me, one would know their spouse, right? And another one is when in one chapter the 5th wife is all about âhelp our husband and tell him I helped youâ being selfless, and the next one âShe stole my giftâ only caring about herself, not the husband nor the children.
-The auxiliary chapter before the real one is perfect for your novel; you can provide the vocabulary you invented for your world there with meanings to them. It would also be super cool for you to review your work and add a map of your world within it, which incites intrigue.
If I stopped making sense, itâs because I have a fever and itâs way past logical hours in this part of the globe! Your book is one that Iâll keep on reading. You and your novel are something else. You're amazing. Don't ever quit.
P.S. If you want to attract readersâ attention to your novel, change your cover it does not do it just at all.