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from_another_world
Ah, I finished reading the first two chapters. The prologue honestly is so good, but you cut its potential by rushing it's ending (You could make his death more dramatic, you know like he reminiscing about her wife before crossing the fateful street and meeting Truck-kun or else). But chapter two... let's just say, it's really hard to read that I stopped. First, it's not a direct continuation from the prologue, second at the prologue you used "I" pov, but then it got messy on chapter two that I don't know who's story is this. I really want to read the continuation of your story, so please, ganbatte kudasai nee!