from_another_world
Ah, I finished reading the first two chapters. The prologue honestly is so good, but you cut its potential by rushing it's ending (You could make his death more dramatic, you know like he reminiscing about her wife before crossing the fateful street and meeting Truck-kun or else). But chapter two... let's just say, it's really hard to read that I stopped. First, it's not a direct continuation from the prologue, second at the prologue you used "I" pov, but then it got messy on chapter two that I don't know who's story is this. I really want to read the continuation of your story, so please, ganbatte kudasai nee!

    Junni_MC
    Wait, I just finished reading your first chapter and you already revise it eh? Hmm, I try reading it more tomorrow hehe.

      Little_North_Star
      I'm sorry, I could only read the first chapter. Honestly, the premise is good. What is it like to live with a terrifying yet handsome husband? But I find it hard to understand how Abi act. Is she scared or not? Why is she scared? Etc. Perhaps I misunderstood Abi because of the structure and grammar.

        JA_Chrysant
        Thanks for your efforts
        Well, It's understandable. I think you haven't read many transmigration novels. I will work on this chapter to show 'How he transmigrated in another body'
        Sorry for the inconvenience

        JA_Chrysant That is understandable, but keep in mind that she's still afraid of Abaddon, after all, there are a lot of different factors when it came to conversations and one of them is age and strength. Lilith and Abaddon are both old monsters who lived for so long, so her manner of speak isn't that full of emotion, plus she is fearful like I said. But obviously I'll try to work on the character dialogues way more to improve it. Your review is honestly helpful, but you can you tell me if the story makes you read more than that, or is it boring?

          Choka
          Oh, I actually went past 5 chapters. Besides the character, everything else is fun!

            [Congratulations, Terranian survivor #99598, for activating the Universe Assistance System!]

            Althea, along with the remaining 1% of the population of their home planet, stared at the holographic screen in front of them in confusion.

            Their galaxy was apparently ending, and suddenly announcements from an alien system appeared in their heads, telling them they would be permanently transfered to another world.

            The survivors were all very depressed. First they were forced to survive in a zombie apocalypse, and now they had to survive a new world altogether?

            It just so happened that Althea was one of the few people who got the Lord Token, the ticket to controlling a territory---a supposed safe haven for her people.

            Althea looked at her very large stomach and sighed at an unknown future.

            Would she be able to build a good home for her children and fellowmen?

            And... would she and her husband find each other again?


            Tags: #Josei, #Apocalypse, #Infrastructure, #KingdomBuilding, #Romance, #Game Elements, #System #LitRPG

            https://www.webnovel.com/book/altera-city-in-another-world_25926694405418805

              Out of Existence

              Out of Existence

              A journey of a man through the history of another world, from its creation up to its end.

              A journey to a new universe, discovering how other universes were made and it's corresponding universal laws, how worlds were made and came to be.

              The story is full of misunderstandings, as to show how every individual has a unique world.

              The story contains, sword and magic, technological advancement, gods and their unique intances, life lessons, and bland humor.
              Link: Out of Existence

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