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Zyanide100 Hi Scarlet dream!

I've given your work a review, and you can check it out to see my full thoughts on your story :)
I look forward to seeing your review of my own work! Even if you just want to read the first 3-5 chapters and give an impressional review that would be extremely helpful to me!
Best wishes to you, and I hope you have lots of fun continuing this awesome supernatural story!

Skipabbeat
Hello! I'd love to do a swap with you, please link the book you want to be reviewed in a comment to this message :)

Here you can find my story 'Hero Scout' to review in turn : https://www.webnovel.com/book/15971607806674905/Hero-Scout

I really hope you like it! I take feedback very seriously, and have already improved a lot with the help of others :)

Overlord_Venus

Overlord_Venus
Hello Mr Overlord!

I have read your work and found it to be a deeply enthralling tale :)
Please see my review to find my exact thoughts and feedback!

I wish you all the best with your future writing.

Jeysss
I'm a newbie too! We need to stand together, and lift each other up Mr Owler!

Lukresya
Hello Lukresya,

I gave your book a review, and found it to be a very dreamy still of writing! It's so nice to read something different, and you can see my exact thoughts in the review itself.
As for my story 'Hero Scout' you can find it here: https://www.webnovel.com/book/15971607806674905/Hero-Scout

Happy reading, I really hope you like my story as much as I did yours <3

fagfaghahadshs

I got your review down, with out a doubt an adult novel. XD Overall the story passing seemed slow to me but I'm more used to reading more action focused stories so I think you probably don't have too much to worry about. That's the biggest thing I noticed. Another thing that kind of seemed off to me was about the MC, when he felt awkward holding a girl in his arms being naked it seemed to not particularly match his character, either that or his character isn't actually as bad as his reputation. This is an important distinction to make because he could be like the MC of overlord where he's actually not so bad, or he could totally be the worst person to have ever lived. The throne of human suffering and his minions most certainly give of his evilness, however he never actually admits one way or the other to the reader, so I was left wondering for quite awhile.

Grammar and descriptions were all excellent aside from a few typos, there weren't that many though. The description of the second infernal was especially excellent right near the beginning of the story.

Willsimulated
Thanks for reviewing it. It really means a lot to an amateur writer like me.
I'd get to your story as well when I get the time and that would probably be next week (sorry about that).
I'm looking forward to it though.

Scott_Crosswhite Hahaha. Thanks for the review. It helped a lot.
Well, the story is more focused on Comedy in the early chapters, with both action and drama especially in the late volumes.
About Demon King, he's just totally bored of doing absolutely anything. And since he's done evil deeds more than anything else, he's tired of doing evil things more than the other stuff.
That's supposed to be the reason why he doesn't look "evil" in appearance and attitude. I mean, looking at chapter 3, he just refuses the 2nd seat's offerings and suggestions and says all of those evil entertainments are boring to him. I thought I kinda made it obvious there, or maybe when I described the demon king as a normal human at the ending of chapter 2?
There's a lot of difference between a demon king who wants to kill the others, and the one who wants to kill himself.
Anyways, the contradiction in one's expectation and the thing he faces in the end can lead to a good comical show.
But I'm really grateful for you sharing your point of view. I can have a better understanding of how things might look like for the readers.

Please critique my work I usually just write short stories and poems this is my 2nd story that I want to make and post online for people to see

https://www.webnovel.com/book/15947684206610305/An-Expansion

It's about peoples view of earth with people having gifts and are expanding their reach through the cosmos an ever expanding world.

Zyanide100
Hoho, the time frame doesn't matter. I'm just crossing my fingers you'll like it haha :P

Nightmare_weaver I'm happy to do a review swap with you with my story The Day I Met Striker

Willsimulated Thank you so much. I hope my feedback will be valuable for you. Please do the same for me!

Link to my story: https://www.webnovel.com/book/15645697206613905/The-Day-I-Met-Striker

Nightmare_weaver sure view swap let ne read your novel first

IKW Reviewed your work. You dont have many chapters so I was kinda limited

ReincarnatedSaint Interested in a Review swap?

Skipabbeat reviewed your story. You haven't been updating and I feel like if you update regularly then you can get a good following

RozaCsergo I've reviewed your work. I hope you can do mine too. You're a good writer and I hope you continue to write. I wish you luck in your endeavors.

Nightmare_weaver Thank you so much, I just posted my review.