Lukresya
Hello Lukresya,

I gave your book a review, and found it to be a very dreamy still of writing! It's so nice to read something different, and you can see my exact thoughts in the review itself.
As for my story 'Hero Scout' you can find it here: https://www.webnovel.com/book/15971607806674905/Hero-Scout

Happy reading, I really hope you like my story as much as I did yours <3

      fagfaghahadshs

      I got your review down, with out a doubt an adult novel. XD Overall the story passing seemed slow to me but I'm more used to reading more action focused stories so I think you probably don't have too much to worry about. That's the biggest thing I noticed. Another thing that kind of seemed off to me was about the MC, when he felt awkward holding a girl in his arms being naked it seemed to not particularly match his character, either that or his character isn't actually as bad as his reputation. This is an important distinction to make because he could be like the MC of overlord where he's actually not so bad, or he could totally be the worst person to have ever lived. The throne of human suffering and his minions most certainly give of his evilness, however he never actually admits one way or the other to the reader, so I was left wondering for quite awhile.

      Grammar and descriptions were all excellent aside from a few typos, there weren't that many though. The description of the second infernal was especially excellent right near the beginning of the story.

          Willsimulated
          Thanks for reviewing it. It really means a lot to an amateur writer like me.
          I'd get to your story as well when I get the time and that would probably be next week (sorry about that).
          I'm looking forward to it though.

              Scott_Crosswhite Hahaha. Thanks for the review. It helped a lot.
              Well, the story is more focused on Comedy in the early chapters, with both action and drama especially in the late volumes.
              About Demon King, he's just totally bored of doing absolutely anything. And since he's done evil deeds more than anything else, he's tired of doing evil things more than the other stuff.
              That's supposed to be the reason why he doesn't look "evil" in appearance and attitude. I mean, looking at chapter 3, he just refuses the 2nd seat's offerings and suggestions and says all of those evil entertainments are boring to him. I thought I kinda made it obvious there, or maybe when I described the demon king as a normal human at the ending of chapter 2?
              There's a lot of difference between a demon king who wants to kill the others, and the one who wants to kill himself.
              Anyways, the contradiction in one's expectation and the thing he faces in the end can lead to a good comical show.
              But I'm really grateful for you sharing your point of view. I can have a better understanding of how things might look like for the readers.

                  Are any of you interested in a novel honest review swap? And if you have time, I'd love any critique on my novel too.
                  https://www.webnovel.com/book/15916100706421405/The-Dream-Shifter
                  I'm a first time writer and my work just got into rank 46 for new orginal novels. I would love any suggestions to improve myself or if you simply want a review swap.

                  Title: The Dream Shifter
                  What do you do when you lead a mundane daily life and one day someone comes to kill you?
                  You who just used to be bullied now has to fight for his life.
                  Just a simple boy forced to accept new powers hidden inside of him.
                  To draw his sword and fight.
                  He must make a choice, to fight and protect those he loves or give up and lose his family.
                  Yuki must claim what is rightfully his and lead those that follow him
                  Watch as Yuki changes himself from a timid, weak willed man to the confident domineering that can face the hordes of enemies that stand between him and his rightful throne
                  Join Yuki in his journey as he fights to protect those he love.

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                                                                                            I have been wanting to have someone share his thoughts on my creation.

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                                                                                            The Ancient Genes

                                                                                            The story about a weak and coward boy, who meets god and is given a blessing to save humanity. Will he be able to overcome his personality and save the world.

                                                                                            Genres : system, academy, superpowers etc.

                                                                                              Hey everyone! Just joined. I've published quite a bit of work here in the past few hours if you're interested in checking any of them out. Rather than list them all here, I'll just highlight one of them here:

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                                                                                              Synopsis:
                                                                                              A town with a dark and deadly secret. A cult group, named the Chosen, are using people as sacrifices to an old race of beings only known as the Ancient Ones. Tasked by a government agency to investigate this matter, Eliana Hunt, must sacrifice her friendships and values to take down the Chosen and prevent an ancient relic from destroying the world.

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