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Detailed Review Request Thread!!
Yashima099
Note that I only do that when I feel like it. It's totally random.
Synopsis analysis:
Synopsis:
Luca Yashima is an introverted 18-year-old teenage boy who dreamt of being an “IDOL” when he was a child despite his social condition. When I read this, I feel like the sentence isn't finished. There is something missing, or you simply didn't write well enough. You can correct it by simply adding the word I added.
Following his ticket flying through the air, a speeding truck suddenly appears around the corner, meeting his demise. With the help of a lesser god who lost a bet from Apollo, he was offered to be reincarnated to a parallel world. A world where music is banned, a world full of chaos and misery.
To avoid things going the same way as his past life, he vowed that he will do everything to live his new life, enjoy music & become an idol that he always dreamt of in exchange for a wish—a wish that will help him, a wish that will bring rhythm to that world. Possible missing sentence here Only to found himself stuck on a cycle of failures and misfortunes after his revival.
On his quest, he meets a carefree commoner who puts a smile on everyone he encounters, now what I imagine is a guy drawing a smile on everyone he encounters. I think you wanted to write "who puts a smile on people's faces" or something like that. I'm too lazy to do the correct wording a notorious general who has a soft spot for weak and feeble, and a crowned solemn indecisive prince who mourns and hates music. This, however, ends up having unexpected consequences and leap possible wrong choice of word to his dream to become famous.
Be careful about your synopsis's structure. It looks like a block of foie gras when it should look like a hamburger (meaning composed of different parts.) Separating it into different parts enhances readability.
It does have every element necessary for a good blurb tho. There are probably more things to say about it, but I'll stop here.
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silent_walker
Thanks! Just doing it to help a bit Grand Void Daoist and the fun of it. The moderator is kind of... alone waging war against powerful enemies: Angry Spammers. And Yue bot is... I don't know where she is, probably vacation. Some other guy Motivated Sloth does work wonders and stops Angry Spammers attacks often enough. But, they keep coming so... it's a never-ending war. I'm just standing on the sideline with popcorn and throwing some health potions here there to help a bit. Hahahaha.
My review to-do list is currently full. However, I'll remember your request and come to you when I'm done with the others. If by then somebody didn't already review yours that is.
Yoan_Roturier
No problem... I know how much effort it takes to critique honestly... Thanks.
Yoan_Roturier Ok thank you!
LINK: THE REVELATION OF MANKIND
TAG: FANTASY, HORROR, ADVENTURE, ACTION, MATURE, SYSTEM
SYNOPSIS:
With the revelation of the end of the world was prophesied. The myths, tales, as well as legends that our forefathers recited from epoch to epoch, have begun.
In the Medieval Ages on a vast stormy night. A withered elderly man composes a poem frantically, his eyes turning dry and cracked. With the lamps beside him flickering incessantly, along with his menacing shadow, mimicking his frenzied movements. Shortly, a bolt of lightning illuminated his side profile, exposing a glimpse of his smile.
Using his withered hand, in adding the final stroke. In the distant future, the world shall burn this poem into their minds, 'Kildare'
A voice speaks from the Earth below, reaching the sky above, begging God for mercy.
The angels tremble and the demons lament.
Four winds will rise and the rainbow falls, driving the demons back to Hell.
The four elements cry in unison:
"Mercy, Jesus, Son of Mary, as you are God and King of Heaven!"
Waking up to be faced with legions of enemies, Bryan Godfrey sat on top of a hill of corpses, drenched in blood, while peering over the bloodied horizon, muttering ruefully, "Will this ever end?"
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Honestly, I'm quite nervous, but I've just done some editing, and I've only finished on the few chapters early on, if you have time, please tell me if what i did is plausible in the long run :) ty btw. Cheers!
Yoan_Roturier I am here, Yoan-san. Awaiting the review
Yoan_Roturier
Wow... this is some pretty awesome idea. How about you review my book, MORTAL GODS: Enouka
BOOK LINK: https://www.webnovel.com/book/mortal-gods-enouka_20053124306066605
Synopsis:
A prisoner out for revenge, a power-hungry redhead, a fallen god and a little princess with superpowers and an impossible quest, go all out in the fight to acquire the power capable of destroying the multiverse. Whether it is to save a kingdom, to get revenge, for world domination, or merely to fall in love with it, none of them can do without this power... and so they bring Carnage! This is a tale of revenge, of betrayal, of love and of powers.
Thank you
Yoan_Roturier yes! I see that it's confusing when I wrote that but I'm not sure how to merge them into one. Thanks for pointing it out, I'll try to readjust the structure for the synopsis
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SpilledInk
Humm gonna have to wait a bit. Try to see with @Jo_J if she's (you're a woman right?) willing to honestly review yours. You might have to wait a week or two if you want me to do it. You'll understand why once I post my first review here.
A little something to begin with.
Your cover picture is awesome! However, the "Patreon/NEOARTCORE" just above the characters bosom is... hum. Yeap, it takes away the charm or it. If you know how to use photoshop try to erase the letters. Should be simple enough to do it cleanly.
Your title is barely visible too. Do keep in mind that human eyes tend to wonder first at the places you see on this picture.
Okay so notice that there are four lines, two horizontals, and two verticals. The dots you see are where they meet. And usually this is where people gaze are naturally attracted to. It's a mathematical law called golden number or something like that (I don't know the correct word in English). In short, it is supposed to define what's beautiful to the human eyes. Don't ask me for further details, is one long-ass explanation.
So, to put it simply you want your title to be written along those lines. Usually the horizontal ones. Take a look at mine.
The catchy word of my title is more or less on top of the first horizontal line. I added to it a golden font, a visible size and voilà! Haha.
Note that there are exceptions to this rule. Some pictures naturally form lines that would catch the eyes. Take a look at the popular painting "The Scream", Edvard Munch.
Do you see the line drawn by the bridge's frame? This is exactly of those exceptions where you could probably write a title on. Tho it would look a bit weird to my opinion. Not the best example.
Anyway, since cover pictures are in majority portrait type images, this is what applies to them.
In marketing, communication, photography, and film production this is common knowledge. They prioritize those zones to have their audiences focus on what they want them to see. Try looking at a professional photographer's work or just at the next movie scene you'll watch and you'll probably see similarities with what I'm telling you.
Hum... I wonder if I really should reveal all my tricks hahaha. Consider this a little favor and a free course on images' structure.
By the way, weren't you the author who condemned my benevolent comment on J_oJ's work "The Bet"? -_- HuMMMMMMMMMMMMMM
Yulainei This... will take sometime mate. I have five other reviews besides yours and other stuff to do. So that will take time. And since I'm doing this for simple practice and fun, humm well you know. Try to ask someone else for a review. If by the time I'm done with my other honest reviews then ok, I'll do yours. But don't expect that to happen before... let's say two weeks?
Yoan_Roturier looks like he's getting tons of requests for honest reviews, so feel free to send your requests to me as well.
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@Grand_Void_Daoist
I should have checked with you before but... all this isn't considered to be against the rules right? Please say no.
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You shouldn't try to explain that basic knowledge of literature/advertising/photography/etc. to some 'authors' :)
Some time ago I tried to explain the basics of creating a plot, differences between the theatrical play and literary text, and other knowledge needed to build interesting action, etc... but most of the 'authors' know theirs 'literary rules'.
When asked how many books they read in the last month, or last year, the answer was "I don't have time for this".
Alright. I'll step on the brakes next time. Hum, I just thought it would be useful.
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in some groups on discord - yes, but not here. Sorry for the truth here ;)
but that's what it looks like. Waste of time :(
You can create a group on discord with that knowledge.
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Jo_J
Haha already have one. Members aren't much active as of now. They're all busy with some real-life stuff and one guy is a webnovel top 200 author, thus quite busy, so he won't speak unless addressed to.
Want to join the group ;)
Yoan_Roturier
Lol... someone's keeping a grudge!
I know Jo_J . She's an absolute sweetheart. She already reviewed my book, and I did hers. In fact, the comment you're keeping a grudge with me about was made in course of my reading up her novel so I could give an accurate review... a lovely novel by the way.
Jo_J Be a dear and ask Yoan_Roturier to please forgive me for going against his divine opinions with my own divine opinions
All I said was there was nothing wrong with her sentence, and you legit exploded on me
I was so shocked, I couldn't even reply!
Jokes apart, I'm really sorry my comment upset you. We're on the same side, you know? In fact, you'd corrected her on earlier comments and I supported your corrections by liking your comments because those corrections needed to be made.
But I legit saw absolutely nothing wrong with that sentence in particular. In my opinion, a correction was not really necessary.
Thank you so much for the detailed book cover analysis. It's got technicalities I never knew about and I'm glad to learn of these things.
Concerning the little writeup on it... I left it on because I simply did not have the time to work on that, and I kinda wanted to leave a little bit of book cover credit to the original creators of the image. Silly me!
I would try to make out time to get it done, but if someone could be an angel and do it for me, I'd be most grateful.