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LINK: THE REVELATION OF MANKIND

TAG: FANTASY, HORROR, ADVENTURE, ACTION, MATURE, SYSTEM

SYNOPSIS:
With the revelation of the end of the world was prophesied. The myths, tales, as well as legends that our forefathers recited from epoch to epoch, have begun.

In the Medieval Ages on a vast stormy night. A withered elderly man composes a poem frantically, his eyes turning dry and cracked. With the lamps beside him flickering incessantly, along with his menacing shadow, mimicking his frenzied movements. Shortly, a bolt of lightning illuminated his side profile, exposing a glimpse of his smile.

Using his withered hand, in adding the final stroke. In the distant future, the world shall burn this poem into their minds, 'Kildare'

A voice speaks from the Earth below, reaching the sky above, begging God for mercy.
The angels tremble and the demons lament.
Four winds will rise and the rainbow falls, driving the demons back to Hell.
The four elements cry in unison:
"Mercy, Jesus, Son of Mary, as you are God and King of Heaven!"

Waking up to be faced with legions of enemies, Bryan Godfrey sat on top of a hill of corpses, drenched in blood, while peering over the bloodied horizon, muttering ruefully, "Will this ever end?"
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Honestly, I'm quite nervous, but I've just done some editing, and I've only finished on the few chapters early on, if you have time, please tell me if what i did is plausible in the long run :) ty btw. Cheers!

    Yoan_Roturier
    Wow... this is some pretty awesome idea. How about you review my book, MORTAL GODS: Enouka
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    BOOK LINK: https://www.webnovel.com/book/mortal-gods-enouka_20053124306066605

    Synopsis:
    A prisoner out for revenge, a power-hungry redhead, a fallen god and a little princess with superpowers and an impossible quest, go all out in the fight to acquire the power capable of destroying the multiverse. Whether it is to save a kingdom, to get revenge, for world domination, or merely to fall in love with it, none of them can do without this power... and so they bring Carnage! This is a tale of revenge, of betrayal, of love and of powers.

    Thank you💕

        Yoan_Roturier yes! I see that it's confusing when I wrote that but I'm not sure how to merge them into one. Thanks for pointing it out, I'll try to readjust the structure for the synopsis

          SpilledInk
          Humm gonna have to wait a bit. Try to see with @Jo_J if she's (you're a woman right?) willing to honestly review yours. You might have to wait a week or two if you want me to do it. You'll understand why once I post my first review here.

          A little something to begin with.
          Your cover picture is awesome! However, the "Patreon/NEOARTCORE" just above the characters bosom is... hum. Yeap, it takes away the charm or it. If you know how to use photoshop try to erase the letters. Should be simple enough to do it cleanly.
          Your title is barely visible too. Do keep in mind that human eyes tend to wonder first at the places you see on this picture.

          points de forces

          Okay so notice that there are four lines, two horizontals, and two verticals. The dots you see are where they meet. And usually this is where people gaze are naturally attracted to. It's a mathematical law called golden number or something like that (I don't know the correct word in English). In short, it is supposed to define what's beautiful to the human eyes. Don't ask me for further details, is one long-ass explanation.

          So, to put it simply you want your title to be written along those lines. Usually the horizontal ones. Take a look at mine.

          cover picture

          The catchy word of my title is more or less on top of the first horizontal line. I added to it a golden font, a visible size and voilà! Haha.

          Note that there are exceptions to this rule. Some pictures naturally form lines that would catch the eyes. Take a look at the popular painting "The Scream", Edvard Munch.

          the scream

          Do you see the line drawn by the bridge's frame? This is exactly of those exceptions where you could probably write a title on. Tho it would look a bit weird to my opinion. Not the best example.

          Anyway, since cover pictures are in majority portrait type images, this is what applies to them.

          In marketing, communication, photography, and film production this is common knowledge. They prioritize those zones to have their audiences focus on what they want them to see. Try looking at a professional photographer's work or just at the next movie scene you'll watch and you'll probably see similarities with what I'm telling you.

          Hum... I wonder if I really should reveal all my tricks hahaha. Consider this a little favor and a free course on images' structure.

          By the way, weren't you the author who condemned my benevolent comment on J_oJ's work "The Bet"? -_- HuMMMMMMMMMMMMMM

              Yulainei This... will take sometime mate. I have five other reviews besides yours and other stuff to do. So that will take time. And since I'm doing this for simple practice and fun, humm well you know. Try to ask someone else for a review. If by the time I'm done with my other honest reviews then ok, I'll do yours. But don't expect that to happen before... let's say two weeks?

                Yoan_Roturier looks like he's getting tons of requests for honest reviews, so feel free to send your requests to me as well.

                  Yoan_Roturier

                  You shouldn't try to explain that basic knowledge of literature/advertising/photography/etc. to some 'authors' :)
                  Some time ago I tried to explain the basics of creating a plot, differences between the theatrical play and literary text, and other knowledge needed to build interesting action, etc... but most of the 'authors' know theirs 'literary rules'.
                  When asked how many books they read in the last month, or last year, the answer was "I don't have time for this".

                      Epyonnn

                      Do you like fantasy? Honestly, it's not my cup of coffee; I finished my adventure with fantasy literature on the books written by Tolkien and Julius Verne many years ago.
                      Could you take a look at the story written by Udeju?
                      It's nicely written so it's a pleasure to read it

                          Jo_J

                          Alright. I'll step on the brakes next time. Hum, I just thought it would be useful.

                          • Jo_J replied to this.

                              Yoan_Roturier

                              in some groups on discord - yes, but not here. Sorry for the truth here ;)
                              but that's what it looks like. Waste of time :(
                              You can create a group on discord with that knowledge.

                                  Jo_J
                                  Haha already have one. Members aren't much active as of now. They're all busy with some real-life stuff and one guy is a webnovel top 200 author, thus quite busy, so he won't speak unless addressed to.

                                  • Jo_J replied to this.

                                      Yoan_Roturier
                                      Lol... someone's keeping a grudge!😂😂😂

                                      I know Jo_J . She's an absolute sweetheart. She already reviewed my book, and I did hers. In fact, the comment you're keeping a grudge with me about was made in course of my reading up her novel so I could give an accurate review... a lovely novel by the way.💕

                                      Jo_J Be a dear and ask Yoan_Roturier to please forgive me for going against his divine opinions with my own divine opinions😂

                                      All I said was there was nothing wrong with her sentence, and you legit exploded on me🤣😂 I was so shocked, I couldn't even reply!

                                      Jokes apart, I'm really sorry my comment upset you. We're on the same side, you know? In fact, you'd corrected her on earlier comments and I supported your corrections by liking your comments because those corrections needed to be made.
                                      But I legit saw absolutely nothing wrong with that sentence in particular. In my opinion, a correction was not really necessary.

                                      Thank you so much for the detailed book cover analysis.💕 It's got technicalities I never knew about and I'm glad to learn of these things.
                                      Concerning the little writeup on it... I left it on because I simply did not have the time to work on that, and I kinda wanted to leave a little bit of book cover credit to the original creators of the image. Silly me!😄
                                      I would try to make out time to get it done, but if someone could be an angel and do it for me, I'd be most grateful.

                                                Jo_J
                                                Haha alright, write down your Discord tag, I'll send you an invite there.

                                                @SpilledInk Hahaha it's fine, already forgotten. :P
                                                Yeah.... sorry about the explosion...
                                                As for the original owner's credit, you can add it to your synopsis. You're not silly, just wanted to do good by the original owner ;)

                                                Glad it helped a bit.

                                                    Dear Ladies SpilledInk and Gentelmen Yoan_Roturier (two lions jumping for each other's throats?)
                                                    What are you talking about?
                                                    I don't mind if you share your views somewhere here: https://www.webnovel.com/book/anemones_20040643706911505

                                                    English is not my first language and I make a lot of errors (the editor deals with it...), so... I don't really care about comments like yours SpilledInk ;)

                                                    Yoan_Roturier
                                                    Jo_J#8824

                                                              SpilledInk

                                                              Yeah... :) I am trying to get you a bigger audience ;)
                                                              You don't know the pleasure when you read a story and you don't have to think too much 'what the author wanted to say, etc...'
                                                              I know nothing about the fantasy genre. In my review I wrote what I saw, I wouldn't read 5-6 chaps if I didn't enjoy it.

                                                                  Hey, guys. Please do check my story out. I hope you'll enjoy reading it as much as I love writing it. Is it bad boy themed? Yeah. Do check it out. Vote and add to your collections if it suits your taste. Thank you all in advance.

                                                                  Genre: Contemporary romance.

                                                                  Title: Fading scars: scars of the past.

                                                                  Synopsis: "I don't regret saving your life, but I do regret not dying in the process."

                                                                  We all know of stories that the good girl manages to break the wall around the bad boy's heart.

                                                                  This story is different.

                                                                  Athena Hazel Brown is just like every other 17-year-old high school junior.

                                                                  She goes to school, has good grades, cheers for her school's football team, and tries to stay out of the drama. What makes her different is the fact that she lost her family when she was 15. The once happy family life that she had known changed drastically overnight.

                                                                  She was separated forcefully from her dad and had to live with her overbearing, controlling mother. The painful separation from her dad changed her view of people and the world. She refused to let anyone in. She prefers keeping them at arm's length.

                                                                  What will she do when she has to work on a project with the school's bad boy, which might lead to him getting a little bit close? What happens when she sees the real Aiden that he had successfully hidden from the world?

                                                                  Aiden Gabriel Knight is known as the school's bad boy, known for skipping classes and getting into trouble. Not to mention his cocky attitude, British accent, and magnetic charm, which seem to work on all other girls except Athena, who have succeeded in shielding herself from the world.

                                                                  But when Aiden starts showing her his sensitive side( thanks to a project at school), Athena starts to see a different guy, a guy looking for his redemption under the hard exterior.

                                                                  Will that be enough to convince her that he's the one guy worth breaking her rules for?

                                                                  The book is written solely from the female lead's perspective. It's also divided into two parts.

                                                                  Enjoy!!!
                                                                  https://www.webnovel.com/book/fading-scars-scars-of-the-past._20066938906233605

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