silentscarlettt Awesome! I didn't imagine that it will be so GOOD! THANK YOU! With a cover like this, I will work harder now to improve my novel! YOU SKILLS ARE GODLY!
ArcaneDragon
- Jan 6, 2021
- Joined Sep 11, 2018
I see you are 500+ don't worry :) Probably when none voted for your novel, they don't put you into the ranking. I think it's quite effective. It saves a lot of computing power though. Good luck :)
Jamison_C I read some of your chaps and it looks like military fiction rather than fantasy. Thank for your review as for my story. My story is only its very beginning and I am not sure how many chapters will it take. I will try to update the review when you write more chapters. Good luck!
When I improve my writing to the godly level I will ask Demon lord to write me a review. I don't think mentally ready for this. It's like getting a test result in high school and the entire sheet is red. You used 500 times this word during the last 20 chapters hahaha. That would happen to me. I think XD My vocabulary is too limited for such an assessment.
We can always go and spam them with the review that they deserve. I mean 1 for world building 1 for character design and 1 for story development. The 2 remaining categories require checking few chapters to rate the writing quality. Stability of updates just checks the table of contents. They don't create worlds, characters or stories. How can I give them 5 stars for the copy-pasted thing? If it was separated, I wouldn't care its some kind of entertainment.
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Apophis9 I checked some chapters. The story seems promising. Magic and so on. You have some problems with grammar like me hahaha. Maybe your story is to fast paced sometimes. At least first 4 chapters make me think like this. I will try to read the more chapters and update review but my free time is running out and I need to write some chapters of my own story.
AkaGin There are many Chinese novels where writing is mediocre but the story is popular anyway. I cannot stand cliche plots but I made one myself in point of my story and I feel ashamed of myself. You know in wuxia novels it's the concept of extra lucky mc. You can call it, protagonist aura or plot armor. I did it in the first version of this story. I literally couldn't stand my own story and decided to rewrite it.
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AkaGin My readers are little shy I think. They don't comment and just read. As I see in statistics more than 60% is other. So they are random non-native speakers. I really want them to communicate with me in some way. Maybe with time they will break the ice and start commenting. 100 collections and none is commenting is painful. As for real life, none knows that I write the story and people around me are not best at English either.
I edited yesterday my 1 chapter. Quality didn't improve that much but I added more descriptions to the scenes. I try to minimize the amount of "time skip" like "an hour later", "after the moment" and it's pretty hard. hahahaAkaGin That's true but for now, I can only edit it myself. As I am a poor university student, I cannot hire a professional editor. I am trying to edit the chapters, while I learn something or someone pinpoints it. It's little inconvenient because reading my story today and month after can be an entirely different experience. I won't keep up 1ch/day and edit them too. However, I walk on this path and I not going to change it for now.
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Asteralles Thank you for your review. I should limit using time skips like "a few hours later" and so on. I tried to use online corrector to help me with punctuation and grammar. The free version of algorithms cannot replace a human editor. It's better to receive one harsh critique that will help you improve than live in a lie. I am trying to improve my writing and grammar. (Funny who am I lying too? saying word trying is like not doing anything. Although I am editing it, yet not researching any grammar rules and so on.)
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The slow-paced stories are ok too. You need release more chapters or you will leave readers for a long time in the middle of one event. Cliffhangers and so on. What's most important is to actually feel good about things that you do. If you make yourself write stories that are for a certain group of readers but you won't be satisfied by writing it. What's the point?
Good luck :) I hope you will find your way. Follow your heart hahaha! Typical lane of romance fiction I think!AkaGin I read the all current chapters and I felt like watching anime about school life. This is obviously not my kind of story hahaha. There might be some development of some kind of action in the future but the premise of Real fiction really kill my hope hahaha. You can leave a review of my story if you want.
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ASlyDrake
I meant that it's cliche because it's one of the typical deaths of neet MC. I won't talk about Japanese novels when lame deaths of mc are normal. I can't give many examples but I read novel when FL died from heart attack and came back to the past. When I remember the name I will send this to you.
"concerned about the real life of MC"
I know in VRMMORPG genre gaming, as you said he is living for himself. So what is his ambition? I read many novels and in most of the MC has some background in real life too. I hope to see some action in real life. What's the point of becoming king in the game? Obviously to become rich in real life. I might misunderstand your story and I thought he will be nerd playing game and eating and then playing the game again.:D
I might come with these concerns too early because your story is at the beginning too. I will edit my review later if I am wrong to not mislead people haha!@ASlyDrake Thank you for your review. I am working on improving quality. It's not easy as I have a very limited vocabulary and my grammar isn't good. My intention is to write and improve the story with time and come back to previous chapters and edit them. I know it's pretty unfair for readers that will read this story now and these that will read it after improvement. There will be no improvement if I stop writing because I will focus on other things like university and my personal life. Thank you very much :) I hope someday you will come back to my story and enjoy reading it.
Asteralles I wanted to write a good review but I read these 3 chapters and I have no opinion about this novel. It's too early to make judgments about the story. I am not the best person to judge writing quality and style. I am sure, there will be some senior writer to help you! Good luck! You can check out my novel but I don't force anyone. Reading and writing is freedom!
LividEdge I checked your story and it really needs good editing. (If I see the grammar chaos then it must be real!) Another concern is that you are writing it for the contest and I am afraid you will drop it right after it. Feel free to check my novel!
ASlyDrake The story has some potential. I am concerned about the real life of MC. Cliche death and the second chance. I hope it will be not only transitioning from the event in game to another. It's my personal opinion so you don't need to follow it. I don't see any errors, you need someone with a higher level of comprehension to check this out. The story is at the beginning too, so it's little hard to say what's right and what's wrong. I will try to update the review after you release more chapters and I hope you won't drop the novel after this contest. Many novels are suffering from fate, being made only for conquest and dropped.
SimmeringHours Thank for your advices. I will try to edit this in the future. As my skills improve.There is a option of kidnaping some editor to do work for me in my basement but...
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fantasy_land Done. Romance fiction isn't my kind of thing but I read some chaps. Only one thing that I couldn't bear with was the length of chapters. 1 chapters = 350/400 words. I prefer reading one long chap than million short haha.
SimmeringHours I checked your story and wrote some initial review. I feel that it's gonna be good someday. I am little annoyed by POWER STRIKE but we will see hahaha. If you want to check my story too.