AkaGin I read the all current chapters and I felt like watching anime about school life. This is obviously not my kind of story hahaha. There might be some development of some kind of action in the future but the premise of Real fiction really kill my hope hahaha. You can leave a review of my story if you want.

      ArcaneDragon Thank you very much for the review!
      The plot of my story flows with the speed of a turtle, this I know. I'm trying to change my style. I used to write romance fanfic for a certain fandom and I developed a tendency to write things in details so readers don't feel like they're reading but watching scenes unfolding in front of them instead (this was what my readers told me in reviews). Hopefully I could adjust to webnovel style soon...

      I also left a review on your story. I apologize if I sounded too harsh >.<"

          Asteralles Thank you for your review. I should limit using time skips like "a few hours later" and so on. I tried to use online corrector to help me with punctuation and grammar. The free version of algorithms cannot replace a human editor. It's better to receive one harsh critique that will help you improve than live in a lie. I am trying to improve my writing and grammar. (Funny who am I lying too? saying word trying is like not doing anything. Although I am editing it, yet not researching any grammar rules and so on.)

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          The slow-paced stories are ok too. You need release more chapters or you will leave readers for a long time in the middle of one event. Cliffhangers and so on. What's most important is to actually feel good about things that you do. If you make yourself write stories that are for a certain group of readers but you won't be satisfied by writing it. What's the point?
          Good luck :) I hope you will find your way. Follow your heart hahaha! Typical lane of romance fiction I think!

              ASlyDrake

              Why don't kill your protagonist with lightning? He jumps in time to evade Truck-san. He heave a sigh of relief, but suddenly a lightning in a clear sunny day strike him!

              It can be a good choice for a comedy.

              Or if a drama/horror why not going with suicide? Just think of the "Others" with Nikole Kidman. She kill herself and her children, she is reborned/transmigrated/granted a 2nd chance and the the story unfolds.

                  ValentinaKhan 1000 ways how to kill your protagonist in 5 seconds! You have MC that needs to start over or you just don't like him/her. You are in right place. We have the right way to kill him/her! The funky disco way? Maybe classic truck-san? Ups Lightning- san? And many many more! Buy our special edition of 1000 ways how to kill your protagonist in 5 seconds and you will be struck by lightning absolutely for free! :D

                    ValentinaKhan I'm not really sure who Truck-san is supposed to be, I'm guessing it's some sort of reference to a Japanese light novel?

                    I do enjoy criticism, but in your case I don't view your review as such, since you just marked that I didn't go for action straight from the get go - which is cool, you like action, but that's not the way I wanted to build my world. Different people - different preferences.

                    Imparting a vivid scene to readers is something I enjoy myself as a reader, and while I'm not good at it, I prefer trying to do it, rather than writing a novel which focuses on endless dialogues and action 24/7.

                    As far as narrators go, the use of one or more than one narrator is as always a personal choice of the author - I have read many authors that can use one flawlessly and others that masterfully use multiple types. If a reader dislikes it, that's once again preference in most cases. I myself hate specific transitions between viewpoints and narrators, but some of my friends love them.

                    I do hope my writing will get better with time, but a 2/5 star rating and calling my work something that 'belongs to the trash bin' (it should actually be 'in', instead of 'to'?) seems a little harsh.

                    You're free to actually read forward and glance a bit further into the text, but as I have commented, there will be more info dumping and less action until I fully transmit the main character's situation properly.

                    If you were expecting a review swap, I'll decline giving you one for now, as I feel I would be negatively biased in a non-productive way.

                        ArcaneDragon Thanks for the review. I do feel that my story is kind of slow paced but things might change following the outline of the future chapters. Honestly, my outline is ahead of the currently released chapters and I try to improve my writing and plot. I should point out that my stoy is has a mix of different themes. Thus, the mood in chapters might be drastically different as it could be humorous or dramatic.

                        I've read through six chapters of your work and I immediately saw the need of improvement with grammar and punctuations. Although I can't say much about that since English is my second language. I haven't been really interested with eastern approach of story but this might change my point of view of the genre. Will be following your work from this point onwards.

                        One thing that we might share in common is the lack of text formatting (like Markdown which can be seen in translated WNs). I find it difficult to express the characters' thoughts with the limit of only using parenthesis and such.

                            AkaGin That's true but for now, I can only edit it myself. As I am a poor university student, I cannot hire a professional editor. I am trying to edit the chapters, while I learn something or someone pinpoints it. It's little inconvenient because reading my story today and month after can be an entirely different experience. I won't keep up 1ch/day and edit them too. However, I walk on this path and I not going to change it for now.

                                ArcaneDragon It takes me a lot of time to proofread and revise my chapters and I repeat them because I always miss errors here and there. I also don't have an editor but some people I know irl that are willing to read my work help me correct things here and there. Even communicating w/ readers can help.

                                    AkaGin My readers are little shy I think. They don't comment and just read. As I see in statistics more than 60% is other. So they are random non-native speakers. I really want them to communicate with me in some way. Maybe with time they will break the ice and start commenting. 100 collections and none is commenting is painful. As for real life, none knows that I write the story and people around me are not best at English either.
                                    I edited yesterday my 1 chapter. Quality didn't improve that much but I added more descriptions to the scenes. I try to minimize the amount of "time skip" like "an hour later", "after the moment" and it's pretty hard. hahaha

                                        ASlyDrake
                                        People often die in novels by being ran over by a truck, I think he was talking about that Gag?

                                        I read your comment, and not your novel {Irony is not lost on me}
                                        But it honestly drew me away from your novel, as a reader I want to read a cool story.
                                        Not about a cool world. There is many people who enjoy world building, but you must remember.

                                        The world is just the place the story takes place.

                                            ArcaneDragon

                                            Perhaps you should use an action to advance the time.

                                            For example I made a sword in my novel and it took 1 week.

                                            my MC went from a house to an Inn telling the reader its night time.

                                            I looked at your novel for kicks sense you said have so many collectors, you do not talk with the commentators that you have, it would not make sense for people to post. Give people a like or something.

                                              ArcaneDragon I'd have to say, it also feel like I'm using excessive timeskips although it haven't appeared in my story (but will, a spoiler lol). But I don't think I can do much anything about it since my drafts are way ahead of what I have published and I honestly don't have any idea how to fix it and I don't think it will be necessary to minimize it in my case. All in all my writing style is still mediocre.

                                                  AkaGin There are many Chinese novels where writing is mediocre but the story is popular anyway. I cannot stand cliche plots but I made one myself in point of my story and I feel ashamed of myself. You know in wuxia novels it's the concept of extra lucky mc. You can call it, protagonist aura or plot armor. I did it in the first version of this story. I literally couldn't stand my own story and decided to rewrite it.

                                                      ArcaneDragon I'd admit that mine started as a cliche but I find ways to turn that cliche something that's not usually seen (at least with the range of my knowledge) and I started writing because I was so inspired by good anime and manga. Also, it seems that I don't see much of that approach that's why I decide d with that theme.

                                                        ASlyDrake

                                                        Thanks so much for the detailed suggestions! Definitely will be going through my chapters and editing haha

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