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Please review Duality, my novel.

If possible, I'd ask you to begin from Chapter 17 - Defeated, as I changed my writing style and think it looks better now. Starting from 17, the chapters are flashbacks to before the story beginning, so it shouldn't impair the reading experience.

SouthToiletWizard DreamX PinkCotton NewCultivator FEARME JohnnyKbca Assessments done: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/03/04/webnovel-assessments-26/

Book_Keeper
Thank you for your assessment. :)
I've gotten that much more insight in my writing.

NewCultivator

The short forms are on the ABOUT section of the website. They are clearly explained there

thx for the assessment

Book_Keeper thanks

Book_Keeper hey there please review mine too. And you can as blunt as you want. I can definitely take it all. Thanks.
Name: Pinnacles' Edge
Link: https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/12905905906952205

Book_Keeper
Hey! Can you do a honest review of my book. I will be very grateful to you. Thanks in advance.

Title : my one and only
Link : https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/12186924305054405

NewCultivator I'm prioritizing assessments because I want to build up the library size, and they're also the quickest and automatically done for any stories posted on this thread. Review requests are put on a queue.

Previous two lists: Book_Keeper

Plus these additions to the queue: Motuo chonnie SouthToiletWizard PinkCotton NewCultivator FEARME JohnnyKbca PeachyPearl fantasy_land

Respectively 13, 7, 9 reviews left to do in the order listed on each post.
If your name isn't listed, please repost your story link with the word: review.
Currently on: Shotgun

Previous notes on reviews:
Book_Keeper - Story types not allowed plus 20 chapter/20,000 word req.
Book_Keeper - Notice on priorities and review time taken

I'm a human, not a machine; my schedule typically only allows for one review a week.
So far, 14 reviews have been done for a total of 528 chapters.

Book_Keeper just hope you got a few laughs buddy. Thanks for the grind.

SouthToiletWizard I did, haha! It was a very different kind of story, so it was rather tricky to assess in terms of a publishable, storytelling basis. I had to keep to my criteria, so in a sense, the score is a little lower than it should be just looking at simply writing. Once I get to your review, this will be explained in more detail.

Review done: Shotgun9494
Up next: Tan_Liliu

Also added a new webpage to give insight into obtaining that difficult 2 --> 3 point in PD and CF.

Book_Keeper. Ohh I know it's an unsellable piece of garbage but it's my love song to everything I loathe lol

Oh my lord, @Book_Keeper. I've seen when you started these assessments and you're still going on??? Get paid or something! You work too hard! >3</

Jeanean_Lain Assessment done: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/03/05/webnovel-assessments-27/
I didn't dock off points for this, but I suggest fixing the speech quotations from ,,Some dialogue text here," to "Some dialogue text here," --- I'm not sure where these double commas came from, but as far as I know (considering American, British and other writing versions/preferences), this is incorrect. You actually had the correct quotations in a few places, so I'm not sure why the majority isn't like this.

I gave up on it written language has too many rules. I was always getting elbow deep in something greasy when I should have been doing school stuff. I try to make a few laughs. Too old to change happy to be a dog.

Went a little crazy (as usual) today and hit 300 total novels assessed.
With that I did a Library Overhaul and created a Story Archives.
Hopefully, now it'll be easier to search for actively updating novels!

I'm only in stage one of the overhaul, though. I'm curious what anyone thinks about the monthly spotlight idea. I added this because as a forum lurker, aside from looking at many books, I noticed that it takes a long time to build up views, and authors don't receive many comments. I thought this might help underrated authors get more exposure.

Book_Keeper you sure have good ideas regarding marketing and advertising and of course the books.

Book_Keeper Hey, thanks for the review. Very insightful feedback, appreciate it.

i wouldn't mind having someone check out my work. hurray for shameless plugging :)

https://www.webnovel.com/book/13140936805834705

Do check my work for a review

https://www.webnovel.com/book/11772678805522105/35418848932982433

pls review mine too if you got the time.
title:forbidden love-a pile of past mistakes.
link:https://www.webnovel.com/book/12908389105928705/forbidden-love--a-pile-of-past-mistakes

Stage Two of the Library Overhaul: many active novels have been reassessed.
https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/03/10/03-05-stage-2-overhaul-reassessments/
Surprise+Library changed into Skilled Storytelling Page.
Any thoughts on the changes?

I wouldn't mind a review if you have the time.
Title: Wholly Undead
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/11210172405299305/Wholly-Undead

Thank you for your time, and work!

Jeanean_Lain AardwarkThe2nd stella2138 Voidmirage Assessments done:https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/03/10/webnovel-assessments-33/

Specifically addressed to stella2138 I typically ok with reviewing any type of book, even if it's not my cup of tea. However, in regards to your story, I'll be straightforward. I can't review this. Not only are some chapters all in caps, but the rest of the chapters not in all caps don't have proper capitalization and is mostly made of dialogue with one liners on where the dialogue is taking place. I'm sorry to say this, but this is my honest opinion. To review, the improper construction of sentences and overall English needs to be improved.

For instance...

Original:

"no no no amanda. that film is meant for adults that are aged 30 and above.those seniors of yours are putting themselves in danger. amanda my child listen to me. those who watch that film at age 16 died on their wedding night. before you were born i lost 8 of my good friends because they watched that film. its very bad.listen-- no matter what don't even think of trying to watch any thing related to it.do you hear me?
"yes mama.
"an also those seniors you mentioned--whoever they are stay away from them."
"yes mama---em are you still going to touch your make up?your make up has been ruined by sweat--"
"oh amanda your so considerate. i'm going now. rest well. ill be back in a jiffy ok?"
"yes mama"
with that roseline left with a sigh
"kids those days are worse than sponges. i must keep an eye on little amanda ."thought roseline on her way to the women's bathroom

Corrected:

"No no no, Amanda. That film is meant for adults aged 30 and older. Your seniors are putting themselves in danger. Amanda, my child, listen to me. Sixteen year olds who watched that film died on their wedding night. Before you were born, I lost eight of my good friends because they watched that film. It's very bad. Listen, no matter what, don't even think of trying to watch anything related to it. Do you hear me?"
"Yes Mama."
"Also, those seniors you mentioned, whoever they are, stay away from them."
"Yes Mama. Em, are you still going to touch your make up? Your make up has been ruined by sweat--"
"Oh Amanda, you're so considerate. I'm going now. Rest well. I'll be back in a jiffy, ok?"
"Yes Mama."
With that, Roseline left with a sigh.
"Kids these days are worse than sponges. I must keep an eye on little Amanda," thought Roseline on her way to the women's bathroom.

And this is only correction. Good storytelling needs more focused detail of settings and characters. It shouldn't be mostly dialogue. The plot, or at least its direction, should also be clear.

Book_Keeper thanks ill work on this.

Book_Keeper truthfully its oriinally written in drama mode and im trying to change it. as for the capslock you can say i was still immature as i dint know much. so i'll go back and start making changes on each of the chapters. thanks for your honest review.

Book_Keeper hey could you please queue my novel too.
Name: Pinnacles' Edge
Link: https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/12905905906952205

Book_Keeper Author of Killing Xianxia Protagonists With An AI System In Another World, thanks for the review!

The points to improve in seem to be Plot Development, Character Formation and Reading Level.

What exactly do you recommend me to improve in?

Also, would you suggest a change in title - the title is kinda misleading, I would like the change in title to indicate MC's timetravelling and the R-18 content - those are the major content for the story.

March Monthly Spotlight - let's see how this goes. :)

niharikabhol Until I get to your review on the queue list, my only suggestions are to read the Writing Guide (it's incomplete however), maybe read some of the reviews already done of other books, or study books that are popular on Webnovel or highly rated on Virtual Bookshelf.

PeachyPearl The magic word is review. ;) But of course, queued.

AardwarkThe2nd Again, the review will be more in depth, and my suggestions before then would be the same as told to niharikabhol above.

Typically, the last remaining points in PD and CF are the successful conveyance of originality and depth as well as the balance of events and personality. RL is simply the level of writing in terms of language, phrasing, and sentence construction. I wouldn't focus too much on this point until the others are more solid.

As for a change in title, I'm not sure honestly. :laughing: I saw how your story changed due to readers' comments/wishes. I can't say this is the best for plot structuring/direction, but it certainly gives a good idea of what people want. Time traveling could be in the title, and if you're going for a harem, that's always works in the title. Killing the protagonist is unique/uncommon, so keeping that could be a good point of difference.

Hope it works out, this website's reviews are full of bullshit! I use novelupdates but original works don't really show up there.

Book_Keeper when you have the time could you do a review and or assessment on my story?

https://m.webnovel.com/book/12223538405106005
Thank you!

Please check out my entry for Contest 60:

Age of the Hunters

Please check out my entry for Contest 60:

Age of the Hunters

I would truly appreciate it if you find time to review my work.
https://m.webnovel.com/book/12316009105249005?pageIndex=1&orderBy=1&bookId=12316009105249005#reivews
And I would be glad if you write down some suggestions to improve it... Thanks in advance...
BTY, It's my first experience writing a novel. Expect a lot of error...haha