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SimmeringHours
Much of what I say is exaggerated to get a certain point across. So the problems may be much less important than I make them out to be.
The synopsis is a bit strange. It doesn’t really stand out to me and it doesn’t really give you a tiny hint of what to expect in the story. The characters were well made but they seem a bit bland. Like how the MC wants to activate the skill but why? Sure he wants to be stronger and join the front line and whatever BUT WHY?
There are a few grammatical errors that can be quickly fixed if you just reread over the chapter maybe once or twice. Some sentences are fragmented out when they could be merged together to make a better sentence
(This example is not in your novel, don’t worry about this)
{The giant was big compared to the village. The giant’s entire height was around one hundred feet.}
“The one hundred feet tall giant was incredibly big compared to the village.”
And when using curse words, try not to change the spelling. Don’t change fucking to fooking and stuff like this because it disrupts flow and makes the brain stop and try to decipher what the word means. If you really don’t like using curse words, then either don’t use then or use as a censor fcking is much better than fooking in my opinion. There are other stuff but they are too small and you don’t need to worry about them
