UnjustlyUnderpaid
Love, or your input on the novel above.

Please do not leave, a review on the page I want to leave it clean, until I get better.

and if it torn apart by bad reviews, it may prevent new readers from seeing it after I improve =]

      UnjustlyUnderpaid

      No problem, I was wondering if it was possible to have a civil disagreement.

      I was going to play devils advocate, but was not planing to curse etc, and was wondering if anyone up start flaming in general.

      I thought about it and it seems the sample size is 2 small, and see all 3 of the posts at the same time is =[

      I forgot to add that people must be passionate about the topic.

        UnjustlyUnderpaid
        Thanks =]

        I agree with what you said, so much.

        Some of the wording should be edited.

        What you said about the guild so true I missed a really good chance at showing that emotion/boosting word count =].

        I was concerned about the setting, was it to much or to little? I was trying to sneak information about the area here and there.

        stalls, bathhouse, resting on marble little things like that, not sure if it went well.

        Thanks for your review it means so much.

          Acutelittletrap the setting is too little BUT BUT this is chapter one and a world isn’t built in one chapter. You have plenty of time to add/build more to the setting in future chapters.

          I’m deleting the comments in 3 minutes

              UnjustlyUnderpaid

              Thanks =]
              I assume you mean grand scale

              I was talking about the small things, like where the action is taking place, like if I should of wrote more/less about the jail/barracks.

              Also on the comment you made about wisdom and stuff,
              Is it more interesting if I made it super complex?

              I was really going with a simple system like in Skyrim HP-Mana-Stamina.

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