Froschmo
If you ever want to troll people super badly here's what you do. Make a original non-BL story. Everything goes normal. Drop very, very subtle hints between two male characters. A niche shipping fandom will form around them. The opposer's to the ship will deny it because those guys have girlfriends, or do X, or don't do Y. Then, right in the final chapter! Bam! Make them get together. The fandom explodes. One side praises you and the other side hates you. Controversy flies everywhere! I think I just described the BL version of Legend of Korra lol.

    SnoozySloth hahaha so funny, but exciting!! cough!
    I will listen to you!! Next novel when I have inspiration lol, but after I am done with my current novel of course. Writing a so controversy novel must be so exciting cough! psst, dont tell anyone!

    Froschmo thank you for the review. I will at least everything into consideration. But yes everything will be promperly explained in further chapters after MC's father's death. I actually got a lot of tips from everyone in the forums so i do appreciate the tips.

      Scarlettbunny yeah, keep the hard work! Dont mind my nonsense talking, but I really wanted to complain one thing!! Why did edmond get a wife?!! Why oh why, when he was giving so much a gay vibe to avery? You should paired him to avery instead! cough! 😀

        SnoozySloth wow thank you very much! I'm really happy right now 🀣

        I was planning to make 2 reviews this morning, but I had to go take my medical. I was too dizy, they took so much blood hahaha. Well, I'll go and read now so I could give yours and dejels book a review asap.

          Scarlettbunny creating a tragedy scene is great too! Angst crying in drama is a must lol, then revenge after is satisfying!

            Ruen Added, you are #22 in my queue.
            (I only read the first 5 chapters (and exactly 5, so I wait until there are that many) for my reviews, so I ask only that of others)
            (I try to review a novel a day)

              DeJeL uh still on CH 3 of yours. I stopped reading it last night. I'll tell you the reason later.

              SnoozySloth I'm done reviewing yours.

              HAS SPOILERS, I GUESS?

              The story made me read it fast because it keeps on adding my curiosity. So I didn't bother looking for grammar and spelling errors.
              Stability of updates: excellent. 5 CH now in a period of 5-6 days?

              Story development: the MC just started to develop his abilities, couldn't say more since it's only starting.

              Character design: like what some people on the comment said, mc is somehow like deku. A bullied kid>got powers>his bully came with him on the academy>they will become enemies.

              Fun Prediction: they're going to be friends in the future? πŸ˜ŠπŸ˜‚

              I still like the MC tho, got a good impression of him. I like that he's into inventing. The vibes he gave me is kinda like deku of hero academia/ a bit Dean of dark king / and a bit Edward elric?

              World background: the world after apocalypse + steam punk era. Deserves 5/5 for me.

              Suggestions? No suggestions haha. Just keep doing this and don't drop it if possible.
              βœ”οΈAdded in my library

                DeJeL I honestly feel that reviewing your work is too hard for my little knowledge. πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚ It was really good, the problem is that.. it choses its readers and not the other way around.. does that make sense? Haha 🀣🀣

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                I've currently read only upto chapter 5
                Isekai novels are interesting. So when I read the synopsis, i became interested.
                The characters.. I like MC and Carmen. Though I feel like they are somehow lacking feelings.
                He found out that he just died, yet he didn't feel sadness or anything. I know, maybe he is just really really calm but I still don't find that normal. Or maybe, the author just wasn't able to clearly show his emotions in writing.
                The events are kinda rushed and that makes it feel like a big info dump. I read somewhere that it is one common mistake an author could make. The author wanted to explain what he's thinking, but forgot that it should be the characters thinking instead. Try to describe everything maybe on an emotional way? I don't know if I'm making sense haha.
                Chapters 1-3, although I could understand what's happening, I just really hate those long paragraphs. I have bad eyesight, and I was reading it during the night.. you know I tried hard just to read it. It was too painful for my eyes, I literally cried while reading. So I stopped that night, and continued it the next day.
                Atleast after chapter 4, the paragraphs are already fine. Good work on that.

                Other than those above, I have no more complains.
                The world is interesting. It was a fun read. The author's style is more on the narrative side, that's good too, it was just a bit unique in webnovels.
                First person perspective is also unique in this webnovel site, but it is normal in most Jap LN's.

                Keep up the good work. Every chapter you write, the improvements are noticeable. Thank you for writing this awesome novel. I added it in my library and i will continue reading it.

                  existing it choses its readers and not the other way around.. does that make sense?

                  I understand that perfectly, and yes, that was my intention. I feel that a book that chooses you will keep you loyal, while a book that you choose you may decide to leave. I know that this will stop many from starting in the first place, but I want the few loyal fans, not just a bunch of people who may stop at any moment.;,;.

                  existing Though I feel like they are somehow lacking feelings.

                  I think I understand this, but if you have any suggestions on how to improve, please let me know.

                  existing He found out that he just died, yet he didn't feel sadness or anything.

                  Read again, he didn't die, he almost died... also, for the rest of that paragraph, I fully understand what you mean (if talking about the first chapter) but that will be touched upon in later chapters, why not much emotion was shown. Spoiler but to be blunt, he is just impulsive... so he reacted impulsively Spoiler end

                  existing Chapters 1-3, although I could understand what's happening, I just really hate those long paragraphs. I have bad eyesight, and I was reading it during the night..

                  I do apologize, but this won't be changed, it is a plot feature.;,;.

                  existing I added it in my library and i will continue reading it.

                  I love seeing such words.;,;. It allows me to know that someone likes//is willing to read, the work I spent my time to write... though I am living through the story just as much as the readers that are keeping pace since I write the chapter during the week that my readers are reading the previous chapter, and have no clue what will happen in the chapter before I write it.;,;.
                  Edit: Wait, I should not say I write it.;,;. I am just a humble other world manager.;,;.

                    DeJeL I'm glad you understand what I mean πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
                    on the part where I said that he died,.. yeah I just remembered he didn't. I was originally planning to give another example, but I deleted it BC i couldn't explain it properly.
                    I couldn't think of a suggestion on how to improve character's feelings. Maybe BC it was a narrative. So if I ask that you add descriptions on how their faces change or what are their gestures and so.. it would change the style.. right?

                      existing I will try to incorporate this in future chapters... I am just not that good at incorporating such small (but influential) details.;,;.

                      Ruen swap with me, I will review yours after I am done with snoozy and ivory

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                        existing
                        Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, Edward Elric was definitely an inspiration for the MC. I've been watching MHA lately so I think Deku snuck up on me without me realizing it lol. Dark King is also one of my favorites, so Dean probably had an influence as well. I had never even heard of steam rifles before reading Dark King.

                        Steampunk Apocalypse has been very challenging for me to write so far lol. My other novel is much easier to write. It takes me about 50% longer to write a chapter for Steampunk Apocalypse! than Uniform System. This is because I can make up magic rules in Uniform System. With Steampunk Apocalypse! I have to try to keep some accuracy for geography, steam technology, etc. I also hadn't received much feedback, so I was worried it isn't good. I'll keep going thanks to your review =)

                        Froschmo I will review your work by Monday. I added The Black Out to my library.

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