Niglover Noticed two small grammatic errors.
Her fingers "were" moist.
"A" woman.
It felt to me that our MC lost everything and is now forced to restart again, but this time there is no one to support her.
And I found the last line quite intriguing, though I don't know what that is supposed to mean? XD

      [unknown]

      I would if you review my content above, maybe you have not seen it.

      Or maybe he hates me the world may never know.

      Katekichi

      Hi I took a quick glace at your novel.

      Only read 3 sentences, but found a few concerns.

      Chapter 1: Chapter 1: A dedication.- Remove Chapter one from your title name so it does not repeat. I looks lazy/unprofessional and is really easy to fix.

      If not everyone, most of the people on Earth have a goal in their life. Some want money. Some want power.
      This could be changed into something more concise, something like below. This if was not written like the above for a certain reason, it is needlessly wordy.

      Most people have a goal in their life, often times it is money or power.

      If your trying to boost word count consider reading this https://www.webnovel.com/book/12188725105057605/The-Dao-of-Filler

      When I read that line it came of as preachy, is there a reason you did not start of with story?

      From your synopsis I could tell the direction of your story, but not what kind of story will it be. It gives me a sense of adventure, but I think you need to expand on it a bit more.

      I cannot tell how your MC feels about anything, as of now she seems hollow?

      With reading so little all I can say about your good points is your grammar is very clear, and I had no issues reading it.

      I'm scared to invest more time, into reading your novel as of now if you go into good detail on my Synopsis, I would keep going.

          Niglover first, you over used the pronoun she a lot. If you want to you could use the MC’s name a lot more.
          I just can’t tell where the story is going. Are you trying to make a girl who lost it all get revenge? Someone who is trapped trying to escape? A reincarnation? Or something else...

          You need to relay what the story will be about better, it’s like introducing a character without any goals. A little strange and confusing.

          The synopsis itself is a bit different since you have so much small details added into it. It’s kind of like reading a miniature chapter, which isn’t bad but at the same time it isn’t good.

          It is also strange how the MC just loses all of her items without much of an explanation why... if it was something like

          {after being betrayed by her guild mates and having all of her items and equipment stolen, Ellen was thrown aside...}

          It would be a bit more understandable but instead the way it was worded makes me think that the game just kind of glitched out.

          The two year part also makes me a bit curious. Did she travel to a new world, back in time, or something else? I have a few other problems but these are too personal and won’t realky matter much.

          Whatever it may be, I think you have a good idea and the right concept. You just tried to put too much inside of the synopsis all at once

              UnjustlyUnderpaid

              I will edit/overhaul it with your comments in mind.

              After reading it your right there is a lot going on

              MC cheated out of her guild, given no explanation for why she is trapped in the game, and tossed into the past.

              Maybe I should remake and edit that content using it for C1... hmm

              Thanks again <3

                  Niglover no need to review my novel (mostly because I’m shy about it) just concentrate on your own novel and help others on this post. 👍😁 my novel is about to have a pretty bad (bad as in it sucks, not bad as in it’s a tragedy) ending and I don’t want anymore star reviews on it to trick people into reading my novel, simply due to the fact that I know it’s not my best work. I appreciate the offer, but I don’t want you to suffer through that.

                    gusdefrog same for you, due to how I’m about to rush the ending of my novel like its a speeding train, I suggest that you might want to stop reading it and voting for it. If just to not ruin your impression of a book that started out pretty decently and ended up terribly. I would like to thank you for all of the help you’ve given me in the past and I hope you continue writing your novel with great success(which I am sure you’ll get)

                        Niglover

                        Hey, thanks!
                        I know, it does sound preachy. I might change it, soon to something more catchy.
                        By the way, what do you mean by the last line?

                            Katekichi

                            I quickly changed it to this.

                            Ellen noted it was two years before the game started. Would she be able to contact another ‘human’ soon, could she find a lover?

                                Hello
                                I would love to review your novels. If anyone wants then just ask and I'll read your novel and review it as soon as possible.
                                However novel must not be more than 100 chapters.
                                And warning: My review will be honest one. So don't expect straight 5 star unless novels blows my mind.

                                Anyhow for my novel Ruthless-Losing My Innocence To World

                                https://www.webnovel.com/book/12001029805736305/Ruthless-Losing-my-innocence-to-world

                                Synopsis
                                Face flawless as a model, looks delicate as feathers, eyes innocent as child- Arsenio Ishiko, the Almighty Big Boss, the fathomable leader of the nationwide mafia group, finds a girl that catches his interest at the first sight.

                                But wait...

                                She is not exactly what she looks like.

                                Huh?

                                How did the man that offended her ended up dead with his whole family?

                                How did the girl who picked up on her is now crippled and broke?

                                But wait again...

                                Their royal and regal Almighty Big Boss who NEVER EVER spares a glance to fairer sex is suddenly interested in talking to that little fox?

                                And he, who treats women like viruses, just patted that little fox head to encourage her?

                                Something is fishy.

                                "Who exactly is she? Is Angelize even her real name?"

                                Genera.

                                Action
                                Romance
                                Eastern Fantasy
                                Adventures

                                Tags.

                                Female Protagonist
                                Weak to Strong
                                Strong Female Lead
                                Face Slapping
                                Merciless Female lead
                                FL with computer skills
                                Computer hacking
                                Possessive male lead
                                Hot ML and FL
                                Powerful FL
                                Cold Goddess FL
                                Reverse Harem

                                I couldn't have a constructive criticism till now. The reviews that exists don't tell me much.

                                So yeah I'm that is an idiot who is in search of some criticism😣

                                Because Criticisms makes us better. So if you are free then I would appreciate it.

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