Acutelittletrap
Thanks for the advice. Now that you mention it, I realize the lack of hook too.
I'll probably have to change the synopsis to make it more clear too.
Yep. There is a lot of world building. Basically a village boy given the burden to revive powerful peace seeking individuals to end the world war.

      SimmeringHours
      Much of what I say is exaggerated to get a certain point across. So the problems may be much less important than I make them out to be.

      The synopsis is a bit strange. It doesn’t really stand out to me and it doesn’t really give you a tiny hint of what to expect in the story. The characters were well made but they seem a bit bland. Like how the MC wants to activate the skill but why? Sure he wants to be stronger and join the front line and whatever BUT WHY?

      There are a few grammatical errors that can be quickly fixed if you just reread over the chapter maybe once or twice. Some sentences are fragmented out when they could be merged together to make a better sentence

      (This example is not in your novel, don’t worry about this)

      {The giant was big compared to the village. The giant’s entire height was around one hundred feet.}

      “The one hundred feet tall giant was incredibly big compared to the village.”

      And when using curse words, try not to change the spelling. Don’t change fucking to fooking and stuff like this because it disrupts flow and makes the brain stop and try to decipher what the word means. If you really don’t like using curse words, then either don’t use then or use as a censor fcking is much better than fooking in my opinion. There are other stuff but they are too small and you don’t need to worry about them

          UnjustlyUnderpaid
          Thank you Zhen_Xin and Forsaken123. Yep. You guys are right. I followed your advice and changed my synopsis now. Hopefully it's a bit better.
          Zhen_Xin, do you have a novel? It's a review swap after all. It would be bad of me if I'm the only one reaping the benefits.
          Once again, thanks guys for your help!

              fantasy_land Um, I've left a few comments. You post lots of really short chapters. I've read a few good stories with really short chapters before, but they had a background world that explained why everything was fragmented into small pieces that I'm not seeing in yours. And at least in the first half dozen chapters, you say they're forced to, without any explanation a lot. I peeked at the most recent chapter and it was the same.

                  gusdefrog
                  Thanks for the honest review. Although, I have tried to improve in the recent chapters, but it's still a long way from perfection. And yes, the reason for forcing is revealed much later. However, thanks. Will try to improve further 😊

                      Joneleth I tried but that had a male protagonist so I had a problem. You know female usually prefer female MC. As far I've only read Release That Witch with a male MC. But I read your story up to four chapters and liked the idea of the story. I tried to give a review but then it would be difficult considering I'm female and I might not understand what guys like about novels. So I gave up.

                          UnjustlyUnderpaid if you want to can you read over my story and give me some constructive criticism and maybe a five star if you like the over all story it's called True God

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